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Power Of Darkness


Inside a cell of fragile flesh,
a beating heart pumps despair.
Noise invades the solemn silence,
as hope begins to slowly tear.

Restless jaws tremble and twitch
sable blood stains hungry eyes.
The scales of evil tip my way,
encouraging an untimely demise.

Fracturing, creamy bones crack,
torn from reality with carbon grip.
Sweet sacrifice soured by Satan,
muscles pulped from hells lethal whip.

The bowels of the earth tremble,
heavy air is filled with thunder.
Condemned to the burning inferno,
Satan plots to tear me asunder.

Suddenly injected with surreal agony,
by the torture train riding through hell,
Paper thin lungs screech loudly,
for a final breath they rebel.

Skin begins to sear and burn,
blackened soul ablaze with sin.
The power of darkness invades,
torment and anguish bleed within.

 

 

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  • no way this just won bronze, i mean this is golden right here, i am telling you you and that pen are one and the same, keep it flowing and congrads on the contest

  • faderman1959
    June 21

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    A definitely dark poem! But done so well! The picture painted and the story told were wicked! Well done! I loved it!

  • This is incredible!
    I felt the emotion that moves
    the pen..
    And your well crafted words
    left me stunned!
    Good luck hun!!
    ~Pastel


  • aboomer silver member
    May 29

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    wow - love the wording and images in this!! And the rhyme just flows so nicely. You've really put a soul to this picture - I love it!!
    best wishes in the contest.

  • rhyming is hard to master, and this is one great rhymed piece you have presented to me, i like rhymes so cheers to this, as for the darkness in it, you have depicted it well, the imagery, the metaphor, grand this is.


    Inside a cell of fragile flesh,
    a beating heart pumps despair.
    Noise invades the solemn silence,
    as hope begins to slowly tear.

    for me, the first stanza really made this write worthy enough to read and finish.

  • Awesome dark
    Each stanza drew me in and the last stanza I felt !
    Brilliant write hun
    Julie

  • This is such an awesome piece!!!! I felt the torment and the cracking of bones, tearing of skin.. eeek!!!

    Totally rocked!!! I'll be having nightmares tonight


  • NyteShade
    May 29
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    Love your choice of words in this Piece. Paints a vivid picture in the readers head.

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