Riding through the heavens of time,
in the dim hours that don’t exist,
I view the kingdom of eons;
my steadfast stallion of sagacity
will guide my judgments
in the battles that will ensue;
the goddess Luna will light our way,
showering stardust in our path.
I glance down through the ages,
from the beginning all is visible,
nothing is hidden;
I cry at the waste of mankind,
the earth soaked with blood of innocents;
I shudder as I view the future,
as the lessons of the past went unheeded
and the balance of justice ignored.
My tempest of truth I must hurl down,
throwing confusion into existing chaos,
but free will must remain,
even though wisdom is lost;
I search for those with insight
to receive this gift and wisely use it,
to salvage remnants of learning
for future civilizations to survive.
I ride through ruins,
invisible yet felt
by those who seek knowledge,
as the souls of the innocent
speak to them
through the wings of the wind.
I am the past, the present,
the future;
I represent the hope of mankind
and the existence of the universe.
Author notes
This is the lst time I've written something like this - so I'm not sure of it, may edit, may change the title....maybe "Flight of Fantasy" - any thoughts?
A contest entry
- Fantasy Picture Prompt. by coffeeangel316.
800 points, ended June 4, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Some profound thoughts here. Congrats on the HM.
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Thank you so much 'judyjudyjudy' for reading and commenting on 'flight of faith'....I am pleased you enjoyed this - or it made you think...lol
my lst attempt at a fantasy write...
blessings
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Hello Aboomer.
This is a powerful write. And a new word for me, 'Sagacity', had to pull the dictionary out. It reads like someone who has been with mankind every step, but becuase they respect free will have to sit by and watch as many a wrong turn has been taken, and so few heed the warning.
A quote from George Bernard Shaw springs to mind; "We learn from history that we learn nothing from history".
My regards.
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Thank you so much 'Ace' for reading, your lovely comment and clappies on 'flight of faith'....I am pleased you enjoyed this.
lol - I should have used the simple word for sagacity - which is "wisdom"...not a sagacious move for me, huh...
...yes, you are right on in the meaning I had for this!
That quote is SO TRUE!! I don't think we learn from history at all!!...or if we do, we don't heed what we have learned...lol
blessings
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Well, well, well, it looks like I am not the only one trying new things these days. I was completly taken by this poem as it spoke of so truths of this world that are overlooked by most.
I don't know which of the titles to recommend to you but somehow I think that your original title somehow just works better for me.
Keep up the beautiful writing!
Hugz
Himler
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Thank you so much 'Himler' for your lovely comment and clappies (and roses) on 'flight of faith'. I appreciate it and am pleased you enjoyed this 'fantasy' write.
The title - half like it this way, half the other....LOL - so that helps me a lot..
blessings
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Wow...this is great hun! You should do longer pieces more often. I love the life you have given her, a wonderful fantasy, full of powerful emotions. I do prefer the title in your AN, mainly as I see this as a fantasy poem. A really awesome read, all the best in the contest
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thank you so much 'LadyD' for your wonderful comment and clappies on 'flight of faith'. I appreciate it and am pleased you enjoyed this write. The title score is about 50-50 now...LOL....that helps a lot..
blessings
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I am the past, the present,
the future;
I represent the hope of mankind
and the existence of the universe.
I love this stanza. It is an awesome poem. great thoughts. Very awesome job.
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Wonderful power of words used in this poem
I can reflect a lot on your thoughts here, tells a story in my head, and how we wish to see the world in time.
We need to protect our world, peace prevails.
Wisdom flows
Best wishes in the contest
Julie
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Thank you so much Julie!! This typed up different than what I thought I was thinking...lol..I had a mystical, magical story in my head, but this is what came out...hahahaha
But yes, we need "wisdom" to protect and save our existence.
blessings
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First of all I love the poem, this is great. I really enjoyed reading it a lot. I like the idea that you have for the title being Flight of Fantasy better than the one you currently have. that is however just my opinion.
The last stanza I do have a question about. I noticed that first line has 5 words, then the 2nd line as 2 words, the you have for the last 2 lines 6 words in each line. it just looks a bit off to me. other than that I think that it is an excellent poem..
I love the last stanza the best, that one is my favorite.
thank you for sharing this with me..
good luck in the contest
kat
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Thanks so much 'kat' for your lovely comment. Glad you enjoyed this.
LOL - I never pay attention to how many lines I put in a stanza or how many words on a line - my own form I guess. I just go with the thoughts and how it flows in my head (not great sometimes...LOL)....I did have those lines broken up into 3, I think. But it was the wee hours of the morning - I'll prob. re-do when I am more awake.
blessings
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You know I love all your poems...but I have to say Sis...this one does touch my spirit in a very profound way. I am mesmerized by this! It seems to be more than a poem but a pouring out of pure truth and prophecy. I have such thoughts in my mind of our current world as well. never have we learned form our past...and those of us who do not wish to repeat the past are in such a minority we seem deft in action and recourse. This is a brilliant and soulful piece of poetry. Thank you for sharing this will all who have wisdom to hear.
Az
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Thank you so much Az for such a wonderful comment on 'Flight'....I am so pleased you liked this!
I wanted to give her a purpose - actually, I could 'see' 3 sisters riding, but my muse wouldn't co-operate!...lol....maybe I'll work on that later.
blessings
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Wow.. considering I just did a bit about abandoning faith.. this was a very uplifting piece to read!!
Oh the beginning was sad and so true on what has happened to this world... but the ending was so hopeful!
Excellent write!
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Thank you so much kiwi!! Glad you enjoyed this - another picture I saw (I liked!) - wanted to do something different. May work with this.
I know what you mean about the faith issue - it's a hard one to deal with sometimes.
blessings
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Outstanding write! I like the title as is. Good luck to you in the contest!
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Thanks Neon! I liked that picture but have never really tried a 'fantasy-type' write - I may work with this though.
Glad you enjoyed.
blessings
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Well I like this and I like the title you did a wonderful job here goodluck in the contest best wishes and much love
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Thank you so much Starz for your lovely comment and clappies. I am pleased you enjoyed this - I still think I will work with it a bit...lol
blessings
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