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You Will Hate

Loathe me truly I implore
this warning, you should not ignore

Each kind thought that prowls your head
will soon induce the tears you'll shed

Save yourself from this needless woe
before the choler begins to flow

Your love has only one true fate
to be consumed with rage, and hate

I assure this is no prophecy
it is a veracious guarantee
simple fool, you just cant see
when your blinded by your love for me.

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  • zeroabyss
    September 29
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    "And thus the cummy face resided to a vow that tryingto love is useless"
    (though i wasnt not told these words directly)


  • Deathletter
    June 10
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    Fanbloodytastic!

    Fantastic Rena! Loved this! Very well written!


  • Iloveugh
    June 2
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    I LOVE IT
    ITS JUST AMAZING
    "WOOT"

  • Fulabeans
    May 31

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    I love this poem so very much the rhyme and flow are so great and I really like the theme. I only hope that this person may take this warning to heart

    I love you


  • Titus gold member
    May 30

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    I thought, "when your blinded by your love for me.", was an essentail feeling toward slove, where nothing can depreciate the thoughts that one has for someone is exactly how you perceive it. Sounds like you're great one to row and make up with. I simply find your suggestions here rivetting. Very good word usage as well. Liked this one.


  • JackFellDown
    May 29

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    Wow, This is amazing the rhyme structure is almost flawless. The words you used are Amazing to say the least. I think this is outstanding. The only thing I might mention would be on the line "to be consumed with rage, and hate" That you might say "my hate" or something before it. Other than that it is really well put together. I love this line because it holds raw power

    "I assure this is no prophecy
    it is a veracious guarantee"

    This is an amazing piece.
    ~ChikinTriss


  • demonic.chanel.420
    May 29

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    This is really very good. I love the rhyme scheme and how you can really connect with this work. Very well written.


  • anonymin
    May 29
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    Interesting, to say the least.


  • LovetimesLove
    May 29

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    Make a run for it b4 it's 2late. R would u rather stick it out? **Each kind thought that prowls your head
    will soon induce the tears you'll shed** Powerful indeed.


  • NyteShade
    May 29

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    Rena are you asking us to hate you?...Oh i think not my friend lol anyway very powerful write. Nicely done


  • blueyez
    May 29

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    ha! I love it! This is a very powerful write! Can I borrow your back bone? lol
    peace and love

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