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For The Love Of You

Taking your hand, walking along
the sands of time,standing
  {still}

Taking loves advice and seizing the moment
As the breeze kisses our lips with soft sensations...


Sun shines through my bedrooms window blinds,
Waking me to reality, with you not beside me,
Knowing that you are happy with the other woman of
your dreams...

All I gave up, my love, was for your happiness
Because your love was not mine to being with..

And thats what is breaking my heart the most....

Author notes

Prompt: 3. Titles (must be used as title of entry) -
"For The Love Of You"

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* don't exceed 15 lines of text.
* don't use street language - cursing, chat speak, etc.
* make text easy to read on background.
* be original in thought and/or style.
* note prompt chosen in author notes.

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  • cherche -d -ame
    June 13, 2008
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    congratulations on a very well deserved first place,
    reenie


  • Errant Panther gold member
    June 10, 2008

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    very powerfully expressed emotions within elegant phrasing. Love the use of the metaphoric image to enhance the mood and impact of the whole piece. well done and best wishes.


  • Volfeng
    June 5, 2008
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    know that feeling too...you've captured it well


  • Ithica silver member
    June 4, 2008
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    I have befriended BOTH of my exes new women... [one had several over the years...!!!] As they did mine!!! After a while they understood the reasons I left, and I in turn showed them a measure of success... But the only one I helped was me... neither of them have ever "gotten it" And on they go...


  • LadyDementia gold member
    May 31, 2008

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    Such a beautiful poem, rich in emotions, the longing and sorrow. Giving up what you love most in the world, hardest thing to ever do. Wonderfully put hunni, all the best in the contest


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    May 29, 2008

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    this is so beautiful so full of love and longing,
    it blew me away, though i have to say my faveourite but is:
    All I gave up, my love, was for your happiness
    Because your love was not mine to being with..

    And thats what is breaking my heart the most....

    it just hit me like a knife hehe
    its so beautiful and stunning
    all my love,
    kitty


  • buffsab99
    May 29, 2008

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    Excellent

    I know the feeling baby sister. I have met the man that replaced me with the one I loved, nice guy and I am happy for her. It was not easy pushing away one set of feelings for the feelings of friendship but writing and the support of AP friends like you has helped so much. Luv you sis


  • Spiritual Poet gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    awwwwwww

    Wow princess, I have felt this before and it hurts a lot. This is so well done. You are a good writer sweetie. I love you lots, Daddy


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    The hardest thing to ever do is to let go of someone we love, knowing they are happier with somone else.. I've had to do it.. this got me a bit choked up...

    Beautiful write!



    • Angelflower
      May 29, 2008
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      aww sissy!!!! No choking I'm not that great that the hymlick..lol. I'm glad that you liked this though..


  • Folklor
    May 29, 2008
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    very honest and emotion a beautiful poem Angel x


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    Raw emotions bleed
    Sorrow pain and desolation
    Rivers through this emotional poem
    Good luck in the contest
    Julie

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