She holds her pencil sideways and writes upwards from the page.
She sees her life in sounds she cannot hear.
Her words paint on the canvas like a play she wants to stage
From far away her voice sounds, oh so near.
While the music of emotion forms the soundtrack to her art
And the history she paints is far from mine.
She can make me see the motion in a house that stands apart
And then she shows me how the dark can shine.
For the colours of her writing are the flavours of a meal
Formed from foods I haven't tasted, never known.
So I cannot understand it, but for me each word is real,
And I never read her poetry alone.
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A contest entry
- Show Support For Your Fav AP Poet/Poetess by OrangeMarmalade.
525 points, ended June 26, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is a wonderful dedication and I always appreciate it when one poet can capture the essence of another so well. I'm not good at rhyme and meter at all, but I do know when rhyming falls good on the ear and the meter is consistent - as with this poem. Nicely done... I liked both voices here. Thank you for your entry.
~ Nicolette
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Boffo!
And good luck in the contest!
(Damn fine writers, the pair of them.)
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good piece
I found this to very well done, the way you used your artful abilties to express what you see from someone else's work. It is a really good piece my friend and I respect the honesty you also expressed in it. Anyone would be lucky to have such a fan. I can see why you got a solver for it. Image and Visions
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Congratulations, Jeff
Because of you, we both shine 
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I can easily see why this is in the spotlight. It's a wonderful dedication to Lane and she deserves every word of it. Wonderful heartfilled work my friend.
Love,
Amera♥
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Well done on your Spotlight.Not before time I might add.A very worthy poem as they all are, Ros
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excellent
NOT A WORD IS WASTED IN THIS PIECE.I ADMIRE WRITERS WHO CAN DISCIPLINE THEMSELVES USING ALTERNATE RHYMING SEQUENCES WITHOUTSOUNDING FORCED OR OBVIOUS.WISE WORDS CERTAINLY ARE A FORM OF SPIRITUAL FOOD.YOUR USE OF METAPHORS IS EXCELLENT.WHO IS THIS A TRIBUTE TO?
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It is a description of Dalaney's poetry as I see it.
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I am so happy my spotlighting of this poem was accepted, the imagery is so unusual and so uplifting, I can see Dalaney's poetry must affect you greatly. Your poem to her (I see from her Avatar that she is a she) is simply stunning. I have read some of her poetry and I start to see why.
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Simply a beautifully captured collection of words and emotions towards someone dear.
Thank you for sharing this piece it was very powerful with the flow and metaphors throughly entwined.
Keep on writing for you have lots to say, share, teach and learn from yourself and of course others!
Ciao
~Night
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well done!
I hear ya...we have some bold poets that I have to prepare for to read....piercing with living beating
metaphors...scaring us out of our fleshly souls!
lovely tribute to your friend, i'm sure she was
truly pleased!
ears/Seattle way to write poet! way to write!
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Charming. Well written with the finest intentions displayed. Rich metaphor and image.
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beautiful
I loved this. the way it just flowed.
I can see this is a special person to you.
wonderful job.
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A very nice poem and a fitting tribute to a friend or colleague, such is the case. I enjoyed the read. Happy trails
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Beautifully done. Rhyme,rhythm, and flow is excellent.
Should have won gold.
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aww ! i love this!!
a STELLAR tribute to an exceptional poet!!
congrats on silver!!!!!
~Sailor Ptolema
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Beautiful!
Awesome poem! 5-thumbs up!
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Of all the poems to miss...
From the moment we met here online I knew you would become someone dear to me. Your natural enthusiasm for life and poetry is so contagious, and your heart surely beats for so many here. Your poetry means the world to me. I can always count on a smile, a laugh, or a sigh while reading your words because you put so much of yourself into them.
This poem will stay with me always. Like you and Shiloh Blue, I will keep Her Voice close. I feel your love and I am sending just as much back in return. Thank you.
Love, Lane
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Truly lovely rhyme and flow, as well as a beautiful tribute to her. Also an apt description of Delaney's poetry. I love the painting, stage and music in this. All very creative like her.
~ Joyce
PS. In the next to the last line: For better reading, I wonder if you need a COMMA behind "it."
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Now we've sorted out which punctuation mark is which I agree with you and am editing
Thanks very much.
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LOvely tribute to someone who writes as well. Liked the flow, thryhm and rhyme of these ones - fitting title - simple yet informative.
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wodneful job. sorry bour typin my eyes cnt focus cleaerly. i hop;e it was appeciated.
passionsa
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I do
A lovely tribute.
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Don't understand what this about my friend
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Since it appears not everyone has worked it out Jeff is writing about Dalaney's poetry.
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Err thanks?
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These are lovely words for a lucky lady.I do hope she enjoys your poem, Ros
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What a beautiful and touching write... Your rhyme and flow are lovely but pale in comparison to the emotions you have penned here... Wonderful write. Thank you for sharing this...
Ken
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i am so glad she is back. Her sun shines again, and the emptiness slips away, hopefully to never return...
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