Lying between sheets in thought all night
For I havent a decision, there is no light
Scared of the unknowm, coming in to kill
But I take a chance, my blood begins to chill
Gasping to breathe, its taken my air
Its my untimely death that seems unfair
I'm at a disadvantage sprawled here
Down rolls one icy tear
Polluted by the sands of time
Making me believe hate is a crime
When I speak this line it starts a war
I roll out of bed and hit the floor.
A contest entry
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Comments
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I thought this was simply amazing. The rhyming & rythm of it just keeps me stunned. I added you has a fav. by the way :]
Great work, keep it up.
-JM<3
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Such a different take on my prompt, very well done! Good luck in the contest!
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absaloutely amazing! i felt i was the persn
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Brilliant!
I love your last line, it holds this piece together and finishes it off perfectly. I felt this line could mean so many different thing and yet was just right for this poem:
Polluted by the sands of time
Gasping to breathe, its taken my air
I could really feel that line in me as I read it. excellent work, I really enjoyed reading this piece
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fantastic write you have here good luck
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