As I withdraw from myself,
I observe from a distance
the clouds of confusion
colliding
outside the gates of life.
The walls around my heart
keep me separate,
bars banning those who want in,
so they don’t see my inner turmoil,
can’t touch me,
can’t hurt me.
I watch in safety
wanting to open those gates,
but not my heart,
wanting to belong
but afraid of belonging.
But life is all around me
the darkness and the light,
and I am a part of it
whether I want to be or not;
it will suck me into its sorrows,
whirl me in wonders of joy.
caress me, bruise me
toss me around
it will leave its mark
whether I participate or not.
Author notes
Credit Artist:
http://kayceeus.deviantart.com/art/Girl-at-Gate-81359466
It's 2am and I'm half-awake, so this may make no sense...LOL
Please tell me what you think
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WOW
This was an awesome poem. I loved every word
All I can say, is WOW
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Thank you 'Morgan Tea'! So glad you enjoyed this.
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Hood-Winked!
I like that you have taken this prompt in a different direction to what I would imagine most people would... I love the ending - the separate two lines really add to the effect of making it seems like it really is final... the omagery of 'clouds of confusion' was my favorite part
Keep writing
Polly
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Thank you so much 'Polaja'! Glad you enjoyed.
For some reason, my 'muse' always seems to go a strange or different direction....lol....on some dark, I come up with humor; on some humor - dark..
.....just a strange muse I have...hahahaha
blessings
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Hoodwinked
A beautiful creation you have penned here. I love your imagery, you describe things so well and it jumps of the page. Great job with this another enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing keep it up.
Always write from the heart
Never give up
Kate
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Thank you so much 'PhoenixFaith' for reading, your lovely comment and clappies on 'gates of life'. I appreciate it and am very pleased you enjoyed it.
blessings
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Makes a lot of sense....funny I was awake at
2am writing also....nice quiet time.....
Your message of things happening whether you participate or not, is great.....sometimes we can choose not too!!! lol...Take care..
Wonderful write....
*PEACE*
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Thank you 'islekine'..!! Glad you enjoyed this.
Sometimes - we get the choice. Other times, not. Many times, your life can be changed by someone you don't even know.
blessings
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Hello Aboomer.
An interesting piece; philosophical as well. No man is an island, but if they were able to be then what point in living, for it's only by interaction with and whatever that we see where we have more work to do on ourselves.
Life will leave its mark, and each one of those marks, can be a good thing, if we look for what we are really trying to be taught, that is just my personal opinion.
Sovereignty is well and good, and I believe we should all be, but not isolation which is a different thing. And to be a part of life without being at the mercy of life, that for me personally is the way to be. No matter how cloudy the sky, inside it is always shining.
To be a part of life and to live it to the full means a life with no safety net, no guarantee so if the wings are not flapping for whatever reason, we are going to plummet, and it will hurt. But for those moments of utter abandonment, gliding the winds, we are truly alive.
Well you got me rambling, that is always a good thing, hahahah. Excellent.
My regards.
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Thank you 'Ace'..for reading, the lovely comment and clappies on 'Gates of Life'.....this was one of my 'strange' writes at 2am...lol...was only supposed to be 30-50 words...but I kept going on that picture...guess it 'said' more to me than that!..
And I like how you stated your philosophy - basically the same as I did, I think - you just expanded the thoughts more..
Appreciate your comment and am pleased you enjoyed this.
blessings
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This is when I write the best is when I cant sleep so we are about the same this is a great poem it reminds me of daily struggles that some of us face more then others thanks for sharing much love always
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Thanks Starz! this was strange...lol...I was half awake, wrote it for kiwi's picture contest - then she said it was only supposed to be 30-50 WORDS!...LOLOLOLOL....like I said 'half-awake'...so funny! But I kept it as I liked it.
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A beautiful poem, full of emotions. I do a lot of mine at this hour, 2am seems to be good for the muse sometimes. Its worked brilliantly here hunni. Wonderfully penned and a joy to read
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Thank you so much 'LadyD' for your lovely comment and clappies on 'Gates of Life' - I am so pleased you enjoyed this.
blessings
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How I felt this write..very emotional to me. I can also totally realte to your notes...I do this so often! Loved this one Sis!
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Thanks so much Az!! I'm still 'half-awake'...lol...I'll decide on this later, I guess.....glad you enjoyed it though.
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Wow..set your alarm and do a two a.m. write every day! This is incredible!
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Thank you so much Neon!! LOL - I'm always 'awake' at 2am, just don't usually get up - and give me a big FAT ZERO on rules on this...LOLOLOL (20-30 words??? hahahaha - sleepy eyes, dirty glasses, sinus meds)
I'll re-read when I am actually awake and edit or delete.
Glad you enjoyed it, though.
blessings
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This is incredibly sad... yet also holds some choices that have to be made... I really can relate to this!!!
It's a fab write... over the word limit.. but I still love it!
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LOL kiwi....thank you, though. Sleepy eyes, dirty glasses, sinus meds - I'll just stay in bed from now on!!
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