Iron bars keep me distanced,
but I peer in,
watching you violate more helpless victims.
Just a child,
I cannot comprehend these evil acts,
yet without them
I feel unwanted.
Author notes
30 words.
http://kayceeus.deviantart.com/art/Girl-at-Gate-81359466
A contest entry
- Anyone up for a quickie? I promise not to make it too hard lol by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended May 29, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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congrats on the award. This was definitely a deep write of darkness. You made it clear and suspenseful.Thank you for sharing.
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Hey sis congrats on the gold!
A real scary flippin poem you got here. *shivers*
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nice write for the prompt . . unusual . . congrats on the gold !!
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Oh wow this was so beautiful hun, loved the emotions and you described the picture so perfectly!! Good luck in jacs' contest.. definately a trophy grabber!
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Ohhh now.. this is really fascinating!! And it's kinda amazing what you've said here... you know, as a child of abuse I can definitely relate to this... victimised, not comprehending, unknowing and yet feeling unwanted if not shown some kind of attention.. even the wrong kind of attention...
This is very poignant!
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Oh. this was really sad.. And so expressive as well as emotional.. I really liked this.. You did a wonderful job.. Best of luck hun..
Angel
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A very sad and pained piece derived from the prompt. Nicely done. Best wishes in the contest!
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Oh my god.....just no!!!! Aaaahhhh!
Other than that (lol) a truly great write sis. I mean wow...talk about ...yeah. I wish you luck!
~Kystal Angel
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