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Forsaken.

Mummy, why did you leave me here?

A precious little girl,
I should be walking down aisles
tossing petals; people admiring me.

Yet I’m locked out
to bitter colds,
                              to be forgotten
                                                            a soul forsaken.

Author notes

This is somewhat inspired by real life for me, in the degree of my mum left me when I was 2, and I got nothing, until the age of 11, when I met her and we started all over gain basically..and I am always thankful for that...
So don't pass this off as fake emotion cause it isn't

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  • stavykm gold member
    June 9, 2008

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    So Sad

    The innocently abused precious little girl. So sorry that in your heart and reality that this is true. I just love you hun and you did a great job on this write. Very sad but very true for many of us, unfortunately. I love you though and would love to see those beautiful petals being tossed at your wedding.
    Love You
    Your Aunty
    Kelle Marie


  • grinlips
    June 4, 2008

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    nice

    i like what u did with the ending. Any normal poet would rhym colds with soul (ie "a forsaken soul")


  • Cannonsfire
    May 29, 2008

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    Awww z my dear, I cannot imagine how that would be to a little one, to try to understand being shut out of a mother's life. I am so glad you got a chance to rekindle and learn the reasons. Love, C


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    So sad, yet beautiful. Love Juls


  • Lady Australis silver member
    May 29, 2008
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    its beautiful sissy
    but i hate that u hurted
    i love you


  • Angelflower
    May 29, 2008

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    Ooh sissy!!! this was so sad.. You made me cry!!!! You did such a wonderful job!!!!

    Angel


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    Aww.. this is so sad too!!! Written so beautifully...


  • perfectsunset gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    Aww this was so deeply emotional and so beautifully expressed sis.. so sad your mum left when you were 2 but thank God you guys re-kindled your mother-daughter relationship when you were 11. This was so heartfelt as it was full of genuine sentiments.

    Good luck in jacs' contest hun!!


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    Tenderly spoken...

    This is a beautiful, yet heart-wrenching poem... Thank you for sharing, and best of luck to you!!! Peace, Cyn


  • SuicidalLover
    May 29, 2008
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    Dude....not nice. Well in the sense of emotions. The poem rocks though! Deeply profound. I wish you luck!
    ~Kystal Angel


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      May 29, 2008

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      no, not really very nice, luckily I forgave her and wanted a life with her, cause 6 years later she died..So I am very thankful

      Thanks Kystal Angel much appreciated


      • SuicidalLover
        May 29, 2008

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        Then you have more a heart then I do. I talk to my mother I just don't think I can forgive. Its great to know you and your mother got along before she died. *Hug*


        • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
          May 29, 2008
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          Oh dont wrry i only forgave her of such sins right before she died...thank god hey..good timing, but it didnt make anything easier

          except in time, realising wht i had, that I could not have had so easily etc


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