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Sacrificed

Brimstone,
    choking granite,
          rattling bones

bellowing,
    screams shrieked,
          entity unknown

lost,
    child without,
          soul disarray

stones,
    unhinged shuffle,
          bodies decay

necromancers,
    murmur incantations,
          stench lingers

sacrificed,
    dagger strikes...
          then dismembers













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Prompt: (20-30 words)

Credit Artist:

http://kayceeus.deviantart.com/art/Girl-at-Gate-81359466

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  • jcat gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    Completely speechless!!! You are a brilliant writer!! Nothing more needs be said......Best wishes!!!


  • Angelflower
    May 29, 2008

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    I give up now.. Lol..I should learn to back away when your in a contest..lol.. This was amazing.. Dark and expressive.. I really liked this..
    Best of luck..

    Angel


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 29, 2008

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    Whoa!! Very intense and chilling and kinda spooky!!
    Which I like very much!!

    Excellent!


  • SuicidalLover
    May 29, 2008

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    Talk about having nightmares before you go to sleep! Yikes! A great dark write. I wish you luck!
    ~Kystal Angel


  • PerfectImperfection
    May 29, 2008

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    Damn!!! This is such a poignant and well penned take on the prompt. Intense imagery seething through each line. Excellent write!

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