The electricity of human interaction
Hovers patiently over the world.
Awaiting its chance to crackle
In the hearts of us humans.
The brisk air pops with eager
Anticipation of what is to come.
Sounds from afar soar closer
Awakening the excitement in the night's air,
The patience gone, oh so eager.
What is to come is more exciting
Than what has occured.
The stale past lacks the anxious
Carbonated mystery that the future contains.
The Unknown bubbles over the plastic-coated time
Until all mystery is gone and the air is once again
Filled with crisp impatience.
Silence is drowned out by the future and
The past replaced with the spices from afar
Giving flavor to the blandness that is today.
The adamant choices that once were yours
Can ne'er be changed, like an incoming storm.
Rather than tremble in fear at
The recollection of the effects that a storm may have,
Think wisely enough to bring an umbrella so as to be prepared
For the incoming danger.
Look ahead to the future, filled with static and surprise,
And leave the past to be a thought in your mind.
What is done has been done and always will be,
So reside in the static air of electricity.
Author notes
I did the option of "there's static in the air" as well as talking about the future.
A contest entry
- There's Static in the Air. by IorganicInsight.
400 points, ended June 10, 2008, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Amazing write, I really loved it.
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Wow. Once again you write a great poem. Good luck in the contest, I hope you do well.
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Wow you did go into a deep thought with this one thanks for sharing and goodluck in the contest best wishes and much luck
Auntie
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OOOOH, Lauren really likes this one. It is so true and made me smile, how you say "ne'er" makes me smile inside. Best of luck my friend, I love your take on this!
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So much thought in this. Realy liked it.
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