Undress in front of mirror,
drama pathological,
end of youth
devoted to passion,
anorexia, bulimia,
hungriness vandalize pathetic.
Greed becomes sin for thinness
perversion of sweets
accounts for calories,
ignominy slave
in childish prejudices.
Wish of an image,
flourishing, ambitious,
catches symptoms of
skin mutilated
curves luscious
frail to serve as trophy.
Constraints hurt merit
in overwhelming nausea.
Author notes
Prompt: Picture
Credit: http://adsoftheworld.com/files/images/anorexia_HR.preview.jpg
58 words
I'm Mentally Puzzled too with this..
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- Pic prompt... by LeilaJayne.
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Comments
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Wow! I'm blown away just by the first stanza! I'm left speechless... This is amazing.. I don't even know what to tell you about your work.. All I can find is simply, Wow!
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"In overwhelming nausea..." Powerful. I love your word choices throughout.
...drama pathological
...Greed becomes sin for thinness
...frail to serve as trophy.
Beautifully written, Thank you for entering!!!
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I dont know what to say - except that your pain is quit real and is overwhelming- I've been there - the dark stages of life. You come to a point where you need to choose life or death make the right one. I'm not preaching - but felt I had to share this with you cause I know how it feels to
Undress in front of mirror,
where
Greed becomes sin for thinness
this is a really touching piece
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