As the sunrises all that is left is dust.
I held out my hand but you refuse to grab on, so I walk alone.
Trust, I realize,
Is a virtue that is dying along with the sanity
Of the human race,
But through all the death and despair there still lays hope.
I'm alone, surrounded by my thoughts,
Surrounded by darkness.
I think of the past,
About what you have thought me,
"you cant find what you don't want to see",
I am struck down at this thought.
You once said "it will all end up in pain"
I now find your words are true,
I should of trusted you back then,
Maybe I could have saved myself from all this pain.
I find myself laying in front of your grave...
I should have listened to you, me, myself,
Before it was to late...
Author notes
I wrote this along time ago and it can also be seen at www.poetry.com
Written December 26th, 2003
A contest entry
- Anything by IamXann.
300 points, ended December 31, 2003, 78 entries
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Thank you for your post, I like my earlier poems better too... I really thank you for your comment, it really makes me happy ^_^
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Poignant
I like it... i like the bits that say "you cant find what you dont want to see",
I am struck down at this thought.
You once said "it will all end up in pain" Wow.. I can gladly say that you're blessed if you believe in what you can't see, and that anything in vain will end in pain... One of your earlier poems? It's good.. really good.. and again it's got something that makes me want to have an argument with myself.. also good.. this gets people thinking, keeps them on their toes.. keep writing.. i like this a lot
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This is always a hope and it lays inside of yourself .Trust is not so easy a task to give into and believe within another even if they are trustworthy due to other circumstances that happens in one's life,its casts the shadows of doubt when another offers in truth.An exceptional poem and very well written.
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You put this so wonderful, it's just so sad that don't to many believe it.
Great poem keep up the work and HAPPY NEW YEAR> -
AWESOME!!!!!!!!
Ohhhh A VERY dark piece!!!!
This is beautifully written!!!!
It's ever so true there is ALWAYS a way out... It just depends how bad you want it...
Brilliant Write!!!!
Best Wishes
~Tracey~
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Thank you for your posts. I have given that jesus, god stuff a chance but it didnt help at all, and I didnt believe, thanks for the advise though. Also, oneroleofmany, there is always a way out it all depends on if you actually want out and is willing to try, most people just give up, but yes there still is hope.
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"there still lays hope"
you said it, do you believe it?
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Oh, you're making me cry. I feel that way sometimes too. I used to live it. They've got me on so many meds I'm afraid if I stopped I'd fall farther than you described. Pain and fear. Its so scary to trust. Especially Humans.
I suspect you aren't religious, but correct me please if I am wrong.
I started feeling better when I found Jesus and no matter how much I feel people don't want to hear about it, I simply can't keep it in. He is the way and the truth and the light.
Okay.. Clear the air. I love this poem. It's wrought with emotion and my goodness your talent shows through. Please keep writing. And if you're open to wanting to improve the way you feel, Just give the New Testament a chance.
It wouldn't hurt and it could give you some reading material for the loo.
LOL
I sure hope you have a sense of humour. If I'm abnoxious, tell me to 'Please leave me alone.' But I like you, exactly as you are. -
This is so very well written, i really like this powerful thought provoking poem. I agree with Julzzz in the above comment, that is an exceptional stanza and i especially love
I think of the past,
about what you have tought me,
"you cant find what you dont want to see",
How i wish i'd written that
Very well done... great poem and i'll be back to read more...
Blessings and Smiles
~LadyStarlight~
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exceptional
exceptionally written, and though i liked the entire poem, what sticks out to me the most is this stanza:
Im alone, surounded by my thoughts,
surrounded by darkness.
I think of the past,
about what you have tought me,
"you cant find what you dont want to see",
I am struck down at this thought.
exceptionally written and i thank you for writing and posting this read. ~Julzzz~
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