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My Dark Ways

I can't stop the blood it seems to flood, my mind. Im losing control of life. I quickly grab my knife. What's wrong with me, i cant seem to get free. My dark way makes it hard to lay. Everyday things are the same, Its very lame but who's to blame? What the fuck, i seem to be stuck. In the middle, because im too little. I can't get out. I try to shout, but noone hears me. Sadly everyone fears me. Im not the best, but lower than the rest.

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  • Violent Glass
    January 18

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    this is good
    i liked it
    i felt it
    as a fellow cutter i can
    say that i relate to
    this and i liked to
    way you put it together
    ( i have a ryhme weekness)
    thanx for entering


  • bluewho
    January 17
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    I feel someone hopless and trapped and desperate. Very good use of emotion. Nice write


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    welcome to all poetry

    I can connect with this piece as an ex self harmer myself and I do know how addictive it can be, how you argue with yourself within your mind to stop but when you see the cool metal of the blade how easy it is to pck it up. a suggestion for you, why not add line breaks to even out the flow of the write so it reads as a deep and emotional poem. amazing well done

    Charlotte
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  • Justin
    May 28, 2008

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    Perhaps you should try using a lighter font color, because I had trouble reading your poem!

    You said "had to lay" but I think you meant "hard to lay." Grrrr... typos!

    You also misspelled "because." Perhaps you should try running your pieces through a spell-checker?

    This piece was very interesting though. I likes the raw emotion that poured through your words. Thanks for sharing this with us, and welcome to All Poetry!

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