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Haiku ichime

kanashii no wa
omoide itsumo
soretomo nai




Depressing situation
Forever remember
Or else nothing

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  • DogFish silver member
    July 5, 2008
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    stark, heavy...i like it!


  • Flowergirl
    June 24, 2008
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    that is diffrant but not in a bad way in fact it was great....well keep it up...


  • rhondasail
    May 30, 2008
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    Not my mothers Haiku... ...I thought this form was for natural elements...am I mistaken?...You have made a lovely complete thought, in three distinct images, it's just, I am not sure of the form(and I'm not an expert by any stretch of the imagination)...Peace, Rhonda


    • inspired-8 gold member
      May 30, 2008
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      Thanks umm I forgets just remember the
      5-7-5 set

      • rhondasail
        May 30, 2008

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        Honesty is the best policy, I always say... ...I forget too, so we'll just say , "It's a wonderful haiku" and move along- quickly before anyone notices our amateur status in the 'Hallowed Halls of Haiku'...hahahaha...See ya, Vic.

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