Time what have you done to me!
change why are you breaking me!
taking me away from me to where i can not see him
so vast a passion we have....had
if this is what makes me human
kill me now, strip me from my humanity
bleed it dry, and let me love a love unweathered
unaged
a pristine innocence of Adam and Eve
Time what have you done to me!
change why are you breaking me!
Destiny where are you taking me!
Fate dont hurt me... please...
if this is what makes me human
end it now, strip me of this reality
cleanse it to a dream, and permit me to love
a love forever, tamper not with my loyalties
as i am torn by them two, in opposite directions
change is creeping through me
time is sweeping over me consuming me
destiny blinding me
fate striking fear into my veins
my morality crying
i can not hold back the confusion
time taking me change forming me
i do not know who i am anymore
Time what have you done to me!
change why are you breaking me!
Destiny where are you taking me!
Fate dont hurt me... please...
Author notes
okay i used some words that dont exist but they worked and i like em... and i have another poem about fate and destiny if ya wana see it
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4276915
A contest entry
- Give Me Love...With a Twist by Hidden.
480 points, ended June 7, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lost Love by migit212.
300 points, ended May 29, 2008, 4 entries
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please? and thank you...
Comments
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This is a beautiful poem!! I don't have words to describe my love for this one it's so amazing!
Absolutely AMAZING write!!
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"A pristine innocence of Adam and Eve."
Truly one of the better lines I've seen in recent pieces I've read. Brilliant write, all my best
-Rodwen -
I LOVE EVERY WORD AND CAN RELATE TO THEM ALL,
YOUR EMOTIONS SHINE RIGHT THROUGH,
YOU HAVE DONE AN EXCELLENT JOB.
GOD BLESS...
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thanks,, for the enthusiasm ^-^ and thank you for reading it
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Very nice indeed, i can sense your rush. *claps*
Go ahead send it to me i like how you write. But it won't be in the contest of course. It's only one entry per person. But this is very nice. keep it up. I wish you Good Luck.
<3 Sofy
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