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Destiny Take Me For What I Am

In prayer I beg...

Destiny take me for what i am
slow down, your spinning to fast
permit me: to see , to understand...

Destiny take me for what i am,
not for who i will be, but for who i think i am
Fate, Destiny's twin sister, ease your cruelty upon me
and love me gently,  forgive my human frailty...

Destiny take me for what i am
groveling on  my tiny mortal knees
please  loosen the leash, i can not breathe
Destiny take  me for what I am, Fate love me gently
and remember me, a human being, our hands loved by Change
and in our hands, so frail, we hold you...

fate do not be the end of us
Destiny do not lead me astray

Author notes

prompt:2. Destiny. Does it really exist? Are our lives ruled by some kind of divine fate?


lately i have been in the mood of writing prayers
iam not super religious but hmm alright

mm i dont really like my ending it sucks well i ll keep workin it
hmm >.<


spiritual option


usa ca

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  • maa gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    beautiful and heartfelt words that touch deeply ... I have been reading a book recently that spoke about the difference of "destiny" and "fate", two words that only ressemble each other on the surface, but are like day and night, when perceived on a deeper level ...
    you have wonderfully presented the deeper meaning of both words in a poetic and sensitive manner, and showed us that there might be a prewritten time-line of 99 % probability about the outcome of our lives, we call fate, for each one of us - but that our task is to travel the 1 % time-line of possibility that helps us break free from the "matrix" and guides us to the true destiny of our souls ...

    thank you so much,
    maa


  • Bruised.Roses
    July 30, 2008
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    this is I'm guessing focusing on the spiritual option but you must put that in your authors note please.

    this was a wonderful write so wimsical and it flowed beautifully I loved reading this and I applaud you on this write...thank you for entering and good luck
    xox
    Tash


  • Nothing But No
    May 30, 2008

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    I don't see any problem with the ending myself, but I am not the writer. I do hope you find what you're looking for to end it with. Wonderful write All my best.


  • Pandorea
    May 28, 2008

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    this is a realy intersting write. the repetition works for most of it, but at the end got a bit much. writing it as a prayer worked really well.

    thanks for entering.

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