Hour glass inverted
the sands of time fall fast
life flies ... home at last.
Author notes
My mother died on this day, 23 years ago. Just remembering.
A contest entry
- Haiku, Senryu and Pixiku by Samplette.
1000 points, ended May 29, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
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Hoodwinked
What a very beautiful piece. It is short sweet, and to the point. Beautifully done, great job and keep it up.
Always write from the heart
NEver give up
Kate
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I just love this. Its so relevant to me personally.
Also very well written.
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eloquent lines in perfect consonance with title and background. Beautifully crafted.
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A beautiful remembrance! Also a beautiful background. I agree with Swan song..this lingers and grows in your mind.
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This is profound and will need to contemplate it more.
Good poetry is like wine you have to savor the taste a while before you judge.
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The sad tone is hard not to notice here but I also felt a sense of acceptance--free and without regret. Home at last. That to me suggests that it was a life well lived, a time well spent. I think the biggest testimony for that is a son braving to reminisce that day--however sad. This is really beautiful and touching, and the lovely yellow roses I see here go perfectly with this piece. I just offered a prayer for her. - joy
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I am sorry about your mom.
This ia beautiful tribute to her.
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It's a strange world ...
everybody dies. If you live long enough, you just outlive them all. I've outlived nearly everyone, but my father is still going strong. The ornery ones seem to last longer.
My mother wasn't the ornery type.
I hope life is treating you better these days.
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oh bless your harrowed heart..... and how beautiful the sentiment and the soft and gentle tribute.
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Thanks.
I appreciate the kind words and thoughts.
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Very well written. Sad, but very strong. Sorry for your loss. Hope you can remember fondly now. Thank you for entering my contest.
Sam
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Wonderful.
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The piece felt melancholy even before I read the author's notes. It makes me feel as though she is the one who has finally reached home, and her children are racing to join her at the end. It's a nice piece.
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