There the gentle rays of light luminesce
the blinds with white, as I pass the time with sighs
and hopes in whispers from these lips;
They blossom forth like petals on
this fading day of spring, an endless sea
of wishes; as I sing the night to sleep.
For they are the restless orbs of light
which do not rest and without behest
find themselves in me.
~For I have never been kissed~
But she, with the stars and this receding
line, mark the dawn of night and restive
mind, to whom I must bend.
Now the moonlit night caresses me,
as my eyes wane with darkened light,
marked by that gift sent from distant sons,
~the stars~
and heavens above
~to my heart~
And I beg...for I cannot, in these sweat filled sheets,
be still in a waking dream
Where I lay alone as one.
Author notes
Its been a long time since I've written anything.
I dedicate this poem to the girl I love, may it be, never ending.
Enjoy
A.S.
A contest entry
- Short Poems: About People! by e m i l y.
475 points, ended June 5, 2008, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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That was a gentle read that gave me pleasure.
There the gentle rays of light luminesce
the blinds with white, as I pass the time with sighs
and hopes in whispers from these lips;
beautiful! -
Oh I love dreams, but waking up from them is disappointing.
I hope, for you, that the girl you love
will love you forever.
Great poem and good luck.
-Emily
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This poem was so cute arty. I liked it. Great job and good luck in the contest. (i would give u point but i have 0 points to give lol)
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very beautiful
your word choice is nearly flawless. my only concerns are in the third paragraph, where you are a bit redundant in saying that the orbs of light are "restless" and again "do not rest". just wondered why you felt the need to repeat yourself. the only other thing i noticed was in this stanza:
"But she, with the stars and this receding
line, mark the dawn of night and restive
mind, to whom I must bend."
do you not mean to say "she marks"??
perhaps i am dumb
very well done piece, and it expresses your emotions to a tee.
bravo,
S.N.
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Very great poem/ :_)
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very sensual the color you picked really fit the poem well lovely work much better then the last one i read, flowed nice held story line perfectly and the rythm was right on nice work
mortikie -
Outstanding... good luck...
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<3 i love it, along with its author
~Sparrow
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