More than just shattered glass;
Shattered dreams.
They lay in obscure & mosaic patterns.
A disgusting image of a tainted fate.
A shattered world
With a crumbling tongue.
The reflection is just a reminder
That hope is lost in the labyrinth
Evil confetti of the hopeless.
Broken beauty,
Distorted truths,
& Endless patterns of disgust
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF Prompt Inspiration by xCandieKissesx.
600 points, ended May 29, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honesty always appreciated
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Bravo!
Excellent piece you have penned here indeed with such vivid imagery that shares the way one may feel within, as well as they mirrior themselves against shattered glass that reflects their distorted thoughts and views. Congrates on the silver as well. Thanks for sharing, much love. Puppy love.
.............poeticweaver.......
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Hey, congrates on your silver trophy! I agree that there are very well used imagery and metaphors in here. The topic of the poem also really made me think. Great job!
Love, <3
~Faithful-Star
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A stand out write of yours!
Awesome imagery, metaphor and the picture is wicked. Your words in fact outweigh the descriptiveness of the image by far. You just took it and went far beyond which is great because that way it just adds to "your work" not the other way around.
"Crumbling tongue" - "Evil confetti of the hopeless" I hate it when someone else writes a line I wish I had come up with. I guess I'll just have to read them here repeatedly for my own creative muse.
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ha haaaaa! now you know what it feels like when i read YOUR stuff!
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nice job with the prompt and congrats on the silver
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What a picture you create
I enjoyed this poem and the picture as well, it was a great write indeed.
Austyn
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I like this one, you really do paint a picture of hopelessness. great write, and once again creepy picture
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I love your take on the prompt. You really bring the picture to life. Best of luck in the contest.
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Very well done such strong emotions flowing from line to line..esp-love this"They lay in obscure & mosaic patterns.
A disgusting image of a tainted fate." All the best in contest.
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Damn, the perfect flow and rhyme in this poem just captured me and didnt lett go!
Well done and the best of luck in the contest!
- Nya nya from your kitty cat
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Wow this was so deeply powerful and so beautifully creative. Loved the imagery and metaphor expressed within. Good luck in the contest
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Love it and it encompassed all the pain of the image!
Peace and Love
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i really like your take on the promt; i like how you mention the shattered dreams and the distoted truths, good luck in the contest, and as always keep up the wonderful writing,~Amy
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WOW! AMAZING write!
The imagery and flow were FANTASTIC! I loved the metaphor because it was so compelling and grasping!
To be honest, I'm breathless right now!
Wonderful job! Good luck!
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So much darkness I feel in this piece. An excellent take on the prompt, the flow is so smooth.
A shattered world
With a crumbling tongue....thought provoking lines. Well done and goodluck.
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