Mother's drawers hold such secrets
Neatly folded splashing colors silken
satin spells, briefs of black lace string,
& scents and brushes from around the world.
How are you?
I am fine...
I am murder:
Crow with a cataract, staring & hopped up
on death, in the middle of your street.
I can wait forever for a treat.
From off of the telephone wires
I will break my nuts and yours.
On this hot overcrowded asphalt
stink of August. When you wipe
your brow. I am underneath
that dirty yellow, soaking
you up regardless of your
aromatic profound stupidity.
When I am not on black wing
On red spray, or burnt guts.
I wait in houses for them to
return from a lovely night
out on the town. Dancing, drinking.
While they make love to eachother.
I am a pair of eyes in the closet.
Wearing their slinkiest outfit.
Wet warm cloth filling my cracks.
Soon, I will emerge, and introduce
to not theirs, but your exhausted blissful
cigarette fooled faces that I am the Word
that pulls the blade clean on your fears.
I am the next best thing to fucking.
I am the loveliest lover ever,
and you are all on my list.
I am pure wicked murder
with a purr and dry
kiss hint of the
future.
Just without you
in it.
Author notes
i am a murderer
Written December 25th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Murder, Murder, Suicide! by Mieta.
300 points, ended February 26, 2006, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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sick portrayal! it is great! great imagery...great wording...great poem! good luck!
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niiiice........ i like the splash of colours intro to the top drawer in your (figuratively speaking, of course) mum's room. excellent imagery.....
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Wow!
oooo yuk! very sick portrayal! good job! heh heh, such vivid imagery like: Wet warm cloth filling my cracks.and:that pulls the blade clean on your fears.
I mean wow!
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i like this it's really good.. best of luck! keep up the good work!
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Is it me? or do I see a blade shaped in your write?
I think that is brilliant.
If of course this didn't fall in the choices of, werewolves, zombies, childhood fears, the end of the world, or horror movie icons, alien abductions or ufo's
Then I would probably put it int eh jack the ripper choice, but even so, I really couldn't see it as choice number 1 or any of the other choices for that matter.
I'm sorry, even though I really liked this piece.
but I'm still going to give you an applause regardless, for its dark and clever write!
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Yes, who in their right mind would.
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one last thing, in your authers comments you did not write So Long and Goodnight, which was in the rules...
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well..it was definetally interesting...i didnt really understand the first part of it, but i liked the middle and ending, i saw what was going on towards the end which made me begin to understand the beginning lol. it was enjoyable, i liked it. good senses in this.
<3shelby -
you did a great job and deseved a win wonderfull!
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Wow! Excellent poem! Congrats on the gold you definately deserved it!
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Excellent
This is a wonderful write full of images and portrayal of death by a very creepy and sinister kind, an excellent poem.
Georges. -
Deliciously twisted. Thank you for your entry, I truly enjoyed it!
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this is good i like murder....thats kinda twisted now that i think about it but yeah....good luck in the contest
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wow this is such a great poem and really original. I love the way you wrote it, and how it flowed. Great work and keep it up. thanks for entering and good luck.
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Outstanding to the power of 10
OK...your on my favourites. What a pleasurable discovery you are. A fiercly frearless writer...I envy you ... An absolutely stunning write. -
this is sick, brilliantly sick..exactly what i was looking for...thanks for entering my contest....~amber~
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"I hope peaches liked it" Lol
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what psycho killer's mind? you were robbed
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Very interesting and very into a psycho killers mind. I hope Peaches like it.
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Such good use of words in this peice, Wow, I can't describe what I felt in this! Good job and good luck in the contest!
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Well this is the second contest it's in hmmmm how did it do in the last.I really liked this it had a special tint to it.It really made me think and put myself into the postion and i could picture it which was basically what i was looking for so i wish you lots of luck hun.
Mandi -
i really liked this one, a lot. beautiful write
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you are truely a great writer and you have your own drawings to go along to tell the story as well this is marvelous great write and i feel the hatred for people in this good job and good luck in my contest
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Feel the blood run through your soul. Watch your fears fall from your eyes. Scream into a noiseless setting...
The best...
Bravo and Applause
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What imagery my friend~
Definitely gives that hair raising feeling
Awesome~
Love the ending~
Best wishes to you in the contest~
Big hugs
and much love~Desire
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Nice write, goodluck in my contest!
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No, not at all, it's my pleasure. Thank you for having me.
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I am the next best thing to fucking.
I am the loveliest lover ever,
and you are all on my list.
I am pure wicked murder
with a purr and dry
kiss hint of the
future.
Just without you
there.
wow, i mean that part made this whole thing freaking amazing...i feel like i'm the honored and lucky one for having your skills in my contest...thank you so much for entering, and good luck
christina -
WRITING SKILLS...uh huh that's a joke your a damn fucking god..and you know i love it you do you do you do. Anyways this is another one i love one for the structure as always two becuase it's fucken brilliance and three becuase it mentions your balls in it. And i mean that should always be the focile point of all your poems...well i thought so anyways..i don't see whyyou do anything else.
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Whoa! This is really, really great! I think this is by far my favorite of yours so far. "How are you?I am fine...I am murder:" right at the beggining just grabbed me like crazy. Really awesome.
Peace~
Michael -
ITS GREAT I AGREE WITH THE OTHER WHO COMMENTED TOO YOUR PICS ARE SO COOL
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I beefed this poem up for my second manuscript which I'm editing now called 'mother murder'. So it's meant to be a touch dark. I hope you're cool with that. It should make you feel a bit repulsed but moved if it did, it's working.
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Excellent
Horus8...I admire your writing skills. I felt a sense of deep resentment...no, I would almost say hate for your parents. I can only think that you must have suffered abuse of gigantic proportions to write this tumultuous poem, this poem of tortured emotion. I cannot say why; but in some ways I can identify with it. Your style is so unlike any that I have read before...it is brutally honest and blunt. But then, I think that is your type of personality. You tend to be a person who speaks without reservation or thought of what is "acceptable" in our society. For that I admire you, too. I appreciate your honesty. Thanks for your comment on "Amber Eyes." I will greatly consider removing the ellipses. A coma would probably be better. **Ivy Rose
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awesome write
Oh my god, oh my god. This is purely and truly amazing. I really enjoyed reading this and I love the picture. It really goes along with the poem. You have great talent and I admire this piece of work. Please! Keep writing!
REBEL
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