Speeding along at highway speed,
racing along a suburban street.
Screaming and shouting, living it up.
Stay on the street, and off of the sidewalk.
Beautiful creature,
walking along.
Humming a tune,
singing a song.
Much smoking and drinking,
and recklessly thinking.
Eyes closed at the wheel, can't see the road.
Drifting one side, happy ending not told.
Rubbing her womb,
smile so wide.
Dreaming too soon,
of his seed deep inside.
Jolting awake,
at the noise the curb made.
A flash up in front, a blue-eyed blond angel.
Screaming in fright, so horribly fatal.
Down on the ground,
heart quickly fading.
Blood all around,
no hope of saving.
.
.
.
The trial is held in a musty court room.
A trial by jury,
a man full of fury.
"Let him go free"
The man prayed it would be.
"Let him go free"
He wanted to kill him you see.
The gavel went down,
"Knock, knock" on the wood.
The verdict is made,
life, as it should.
But the man raves and rants,
screaming at the killer,
"You took her from me, my only true love!
Let him go free! Life isn't enough!"
The screaming continued,
men shaking there heads.
And the killer was taken,
and not left for dead.
.
.
.
Crying and moping,
in a dark tomb.
Booze on the table,
of his suicide room.
Wrists bleeding red,
eyes rolling back.
So close to death,
his world wrapping in black.
Lights flashing by,
burning his flesh,
Sightless seeing eyes,
can this be God's test?
Black liquid,
pumping and stitches.
Shouting, screaming,
those sons of bitches.
"Saving my life! How can they dare?
Leave me alone! I want to go there!"
But they wouldn't listen,
and they saved his life.
He is still angry,
and still wants to die...
A contest entry
- Lost Love by migit212.
300 points, ended May 29, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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I guess this could be bothe 2 & 3 but maybe more 3 because it isn't really about a "breakup"
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i was in the mood for an eightball poem... lol
wowzerz! this was very intense! it was unbelievably written and i was overcome by the emotion of the words in this poem! i usually do not like poems like this but this was supah good, old man! it left me sayin, "Woah!"
very depressin, and i feel for you *hugz* =)
you are just too fabulous of a writer, i'm tellin yaz!
hugglezzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz,
Adria
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Wow again this is great. I like the way you set up the poem. The first stanza was the driver second stanze the angel and after the ... the lover of the angel??? Is that right lol anyways its really good you got talent my friend lol.
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I am so sorry this happened to you. That is so so horrible! But to be able to take your sadness, your pain, and your anger and use it to write something so amazing...that is awesome. I commend you. Again...my deepest sympathies go out to you. No one should ever have to go through something this awful. I hope one day you'll find peace again. Once again...this write is amazing.
The One and Only...
~Lynn Jones
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There are no words to describe how sorry I am you had to experience something so horrific. This write relays pain, anger, and the innocence of the victim very affectively and keeps a rhythm that is easy to follow. Though I wish this were not based on real events, the fact that you are able to capture the actions and emotions so well is impressive. Good job.
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Wow....
I cant beleive something so horrible actually happened to you....Very good write though.....
Much <3
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wow...
this shit happened to you? Fucking deep dude. it's nice. Story like. Very nice. Good Luck
<3 Sofy
Tee-hee =^-^=
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