Breathes of memory
blow on the embers
of passion past.
I see the flame
that devours my willpower
blaze in your eyes.
I fly toward the incandescence
and my doom.
Author notes
Prompt: Quotation
Long lost words whisper slowly to me
Still can't find what keeps me here
When all the time I've been so hollow inside
I know you're still there
Watching me, wanting me
- Haunted by Evanescence
Picture Credit: http://aschenengel.deviantart.com/art/Erotic-Memories-14069845
25 – 30 words
A contest entry
- 10/25/30 Quickie.... just cause.... by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended May 28, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome
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Wonderful
What a great creation for the contest. So very well done. Congratulation on the bronze.
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Forgive me for not coming to your poetry sooner...hectic summer so far, but tonight I am enjoying so much the poetry of my new favorites
You have a very smart short style with this poem, which is what makes the read all the more powerful. Congrats on the bronze..
Love, Lane
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Fab take!! Love the passion in this and the overwhelming sense of not wanting to be caught in the person's spell but unable to tear away... love it
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Excellent
This is great, you went in a totally different direction than I did and did an amazing job. Best of luck in this contest
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Awesome work poet!
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Excellent take on the qoute! Also a very cool picture to go with it. All around great I think!
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This is beautiful
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Yours is very powerful too; (LOL) Great take on the prompt.
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Now aren't we the wise one! You have done it again sir, wonderful take on this and wonderful write!! I wish you all the best.
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A very intriguing and well penned writ. Reminds me of a moth to a flame. Bewitched by the asp of flames, fragility sacrifices life for wonder. most enjoyable read. Best wishes in the comp
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ooh, 'and my doom'. Very good! I really like your non-rhymey ones. Good luck in the contest.
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