Chanting menacing speeches,
you slither amongst shadows.
Corrupted memories,
embed my soul
with torturous pain.
Surrounded by
intimidating darkness,
I plead for illumination.
Unheard,
I know,
forever you'll control me.
Author notes
25-30 words.
Long lost words whisper slowly to me
Still can't find what keeps me here
When all the time I've been so hollow inside
I know you're still there
Watching me, wanting me
- Haunted by Evanescence
A contest entry
- 10/25/30 Quickie.... just cause.... by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended May 28, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Super Quick PW by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended May 31, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Very powerful imagery in few words. Well penned and a great read. Congrats on the gold.
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I can see very clearly why kiwijacks picked you for gold you wrote an amazing take on that prompt and deserved gold.
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Wow, you based that off the song? You truly deserved a gold on this one; I like the second line best. I approve
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Congrats sis on the gold! This deserved it. I mean wow...talk about getting in someone's head. A great write!
~Kystal Angel
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Excellent
Excellent take on this prompt. So much feeling coming from your soul. Best of luck in this contest
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Wow, dark, wonderfully written.. Good luck to you, though it appears you won't need it!!
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i love this song and you did an awesome job with this... thanks for sharing and good luck in contest..!
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Deliciously dark! Captures the essence of the lyric very well... excellent
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great write and take on the prompt.
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I enjoyed this.
Good luck.
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