Dreamy,
as moonlight's sculpture,
your touch still burns
upon tender thoughts...
Vacant, are my emotions,
yet,
still entranced...
as my heart
can't undo the spell
you cast upon it.
Author notes
Long lost words whisper slowly to me
Still can't find what keeps me here
When all the time I've been so hollow inside
I know you're still there
Watching me, wanting me
- Haunted by Evanescence
This is probably so far off the prompt, but I don't know the song..so I went with what I felt. and yep, it sucks!
A contest entry
- 10/25/30 Quickie.... just cause.... by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended May 28, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice job. Congratulations on the HM.
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Excellent
I love how this one ends, still full of lost hope. Sometimes that can be a good thing. Best of luck in this contest
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Thank you, you're very kind.
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Excellent!! This is a softer take on the prompt which I like and also captures all the emotion of the prompt, from feeling vacant, to still being under the persons spell!
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Thank you for HM
and your sweet comment.
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Thank you! Top 5 were hard to place!
This was so fitting, yet still had your gentle touch
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One of the best in contest id say!!! Amazing =] xx
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I'm touched, thank you for being so kind.
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This does not suck Tells you to stop saying that about your poetry this is a great take on this prompt goodluck in her contest be well
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Thank you, I appreciate your comment.
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Wow.. another great one. You are on a roll. A very beautiful and mature take on the prompt. Beautiful imagery and flow. A most enjoyable read. best wishes in the comp
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Awe thanks my friend. Means alot to me.
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This is fantastic!! I don't know what the prompt is, but wow!! you really show that feeling well!! I love it!! I can relate as you know..
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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Oops, forgot the prompt thanks for reminding me!! And thanks sweetness for your lovely comment.
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Beautiful words
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Thank you so much.
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Lovely take - softly sensual and romantic. Nice form and flow... You'll do well - no
this time (LOL).
Ken
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Too late for tears now lol
anyway Thank you my friend.
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