Stones,
fell from mountains,
breaking limbs,
erasing paths
embraced,
kneeling beneath dust,
darkness consumed
everything,
destroyed...
but,
in my arms...
I held onto the world
Author notes
Prompt: "Let's bury ourselves in each other, until they bury us
in a grave" - me
(20-25 words)
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie 20-25 words by Cerulean Sunrise.
475 points, ended May 28, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This says so much about how I see the world, I know its an impossible thing to do but one hug for one lost person just may change his or her world, if so, it is worth doing. Love, C
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beautiful visual and very wow for me
congrats on the gold
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A beautiful and descriptive write. You have really went beyond the prompt with this. Congratulations on the Gold! Also, thank you for commenting on mine as well.
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Yay! Congrats on Gold!
Well deserved
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Awww, so sweet Nice job (and thank you for the lovely comment as well!) Best of luck dear
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Ohhh now that's just brilliant.. it feels kinda epic! And in so few words... wonderful hun... expecting a shiney on this!!!
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well done !!! i surrender as mine sucks in comparism for your words of compassionate beauty reigns within the soul. many loving blessings always
xxxx
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Aww this is so good! Great take on the prompt, seems like its more words than it actually is! Amazing! x
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WOnderful!
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Unique write that paints imagery, sadness and then comes the last wonderful line
I held onto the world
Good luck in the contest babes
Julie x
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