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Walk Away

Watching you walk away
Feeling the tears dry before they flow
Feeling my heart freeze in place
The blood disappearing from my veins
Becoming a breathing corpse
Like everyone else

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I just wrote what I felt when I saw the picture

A contest entry

what do you think of it i think i maybe should change it

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  • Shacadia Shay
    February 28
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    i thnk many of us get this. at lest i have


  • night-eyed demon
    June 1, 2008
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    I love the emotion in it, and its very detailed too...being a short write. love it.


  • Angelflower
    May 29, 2008

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    This was a wonderful take hun.. you did a wonderful job!!!
    It was sad and very emotional..
    Thank you for sharing..
    Best of luck..

    Angel


  • Spiritual Poet gold member
    May 28, 2008
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    awwwwwwww

    Very sad. Not sure what to say except I feel the pain in this ....... Love you so much,, Daddy


  • perfectsunset gold member
    May 28, 2008

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    Aww wow.. this was breath-taking. Loved your imagery and deep thoughts in this. Great take on the prompt & good luck


  • Sanguinarius
    May 28, 2008
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    A wonderful take on the prompt, Best of luck to you ~Bret~


  • In Too Deep1
    May 28, 2008

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    Such a sad take on the prompt. Living, we very much can die of a broken and emptied heart. Like the rest of the world, we become doomed to walk the mundane highway of mistrust and loneliness. An enjoyable read. Best wishes in the comp

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