my thoughts hover
around a forbidden embrace
like news choppers
circling a fatal place,
peering from every angle-
[zoom in, pause, slow motion, rewind]
repeat.
a train wreck of a different kind.
freeze-frame explosion
bodies strewn about,
intertwined in an eternal peace
they are no longer without.
flames recede warily
as their time is ending,
suppressed by the mere
forecast of rain, descending.
[pause, rewind]
concussion, imploding
mending broken fragments
reversing the unforsceen sting.
twin silver streams
undulate before disaster
[play, fast forward]
now speeding ever faster
it all ends so abruptly-
but to no surprise.
grinding to a halt
right before my eyes.
longing lingers-
such soft, soft skin.
what a beautiful death.
[rewind] watch again
Author notes
a dozenglassroses
A contest entry
- Rhyme and Flow part 5 Love, romance or sensual - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended July 16, 2008, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love me, hate me, it's all the same to me!!!! by HeartBr8ker.
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What you think?
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WOW!!!
This is truely a beautiful piece of art. I like the way u use the imagery. Great job... But unfortionately it doesn't follow all the rules. So unfortionatly it wont be a finalist. -
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I aplogize I can fix that but if it is too late I understand thank you for hosting the contest.
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Thank you for your entry in our contest,it was an interesting if confusing read, while your rhyme was pretty good, the contest was for flow as well and we found the poem to be very erratic.
Please join us in future contests...Sue and jeff
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Thank you for your comment
and for hosting the contest.
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I Came To Return The Favor
But I'm old as dirt so I can't get my head around this one - you need to do a poets comment and explain it to us old f---- ehhh. I will read it again - then it may sink in - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan) --------------------------------------------- hagd
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nice girl!!! it's different it stretched my mind to understand it, but ui think i got it. im so proud of my daughter!!!
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Zany and whimsical. A touch of erotic and philosophic.
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I like this
mind bending trip! great imagery, nice flow and good rhyming scheme! a very solid piece, good write my friend!
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