Your cold, unloving hands
held me,
caressing me in lies...
My heart,
blinded by visions of trust
left me shadowed in sorrow,
While my soul prayed
for clarity of truth,
All I see
is emptiness.
Author notes
Sorry, my muse choked, I know this sucks, but I tried.
A contest entry
- Quickie!!! (dark) by Angelflower.
702 points, ended May 29, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Only HM? This is so much richer and pure than the others I read... You are gold in my mind and heart...
Ken
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Aww, that means more to me than a gold trophy, thank you from the bottom of my heart, for being so kind to me.
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your muse choked!? are you sure?! this was just really wonderful.. The emotion and imagery were just amazing.. You did a wonderful job.
Thank you for sharing..
Best of luck..
Angel
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Thank you for your comment and for HM. I enjoyed your contest.
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Sigh.. I know this feeling well! This doesn't suck at all! It's an excellent piece of sorrow and abandonment!
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Thank you dear
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Wow this was such a deeply emotional and beautiful take on this dark pic. You really brought it to life where others like myself can surely relate.. feelings of emptiness we all encompass at times. Good luck in the contest
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Thank you so much for your read and comment.
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I really liked this one! I had to highlight to read though
What a great job you did on it.
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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Really? is my background too harsh? It shows up ok on my end. Thank you for your sweet comment, it means alot.
and love
Linda
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Excellent
I like the direction you went with this one. Very dark and emotional. Best of luck in this contest
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your kind comment.
Linda
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This is exquisite . "Your cold, unloving hands held me,
caressing me in lies"...excellent line ~Bret~
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I sincerely appreciate your kind comment, thank you.
Linda
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Wow! Impressive. I see that your muse has awakened after all. Beautiful penning. I loved the flow and the imagery. You utilized movement, emotion and color amazingly. A most enjoyable read. Best wishes in the comp
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Now now, you're gonna make me think I really did something LOL Thank you dear, for your very encouraging words
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