Undressed,
your pain lay open,
bleeding from soul's cavity
blackened,
voyeuristic eyes of coal,
stabbing, breaking your heart free
feasting,
carcass swivel against chin,
twisting wrist, I cast bones to sea
becoming bat... I flee
Author notes
Prompt: Picture Prompt (20-35 words)
Unknown Artist
A contest entry
- Quickie!!! (dark) by Angelflower.
702 points, ended May 29, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Chilling for sure...such strong imagery you have painted in so few words...a wonderful write in darkness...
A pleasure to read and enjoy...
Best,
mystic
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wow!!!! give me chillss!!!! And nightmares!!! lol.
I really loved this.. the imagery was just so vivid.. Thank you for sharing this..
Best of luck..
Angel
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Well another great write from you. (I read your work, just never get around to commenting on them.) This is a unique sort of touching the heart's soul.
I wish you luck.
~Kystal Angel
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Wow I love your use of language in this.. makes it such a good read, with beautifully dark imagery and a powerful message. Great take on the prompt & good luck
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Eeep!!
.. what a chilling wee tale you have penned!! Gave me a shiver... a dark beauty here!
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I love it ! Beautiful darkness at its finest. Best of luck to you ~Bret~
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Amazed me !
The words you painted are eerie and echos from the deep relect the image perfectly
Best wishes in the contest
Julie
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Good write my friend. I can't say the same for mine, and it's all your fault hehe
Good luck to you!
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Good luck
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