You look at me with haunted vision
eyes that penetrate beyond my being
right down to my very soul.
Glimpsing beyond my shell
you gaze upon my true reality
bringing its darkness to light.
A contest entry
- Quickie!!! (dark) by Angelflower.
702 points, ended May 29, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Amazing imagery and view on the prompt...the background with the picture really sets it off...truly moving words of truth, felt by many at sometime in their life's...wonderful work, well deserving of the trophy...
Best,
mystic
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This was a wonderful take on the prompt..
It's like a small child that is trying to figure out why the world is such a dark place..
I don't know if that makes sense but that's just how I took it..The background really enhanced the emotions in this piece as well.. You did a wonderful job.. thank you for sharing..
Best of luck..
Angel
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Within your soul there shines
the strength of inner light,
take my hand, I'll show you
my soul who takes up your fight Love, C
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Oh...nice. Deeply related to humans
. A wonderful take on the prompt. I wish you luck!
~Kystal Angel
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Oh wow this was such a beautifully dark piece.. excellent take on the prompt! Good luck in the contest
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Oh my, this is stunning poetry at it's best. I love this. Good luck to you!
Linda
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Excellent
Awesome take on this prompt. I like where you have gone with this one. best of luck in this contest.
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oh my this is such a wonderful poem, and its a gorgeous background, i mean this poem has such amazing imagery and wording, i love all of it but my favorite part is this:
You look at me with haunted vision
eyes that penetrate beyond my being
love kitty xx keep penning -
Beautiful flow, as well as message. Loved the emotion and color in this well penned writ. A most enjoyable read. Best wishes in the comp
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