Crying cerulean tears of internal sufferings
Creating a puddle of intoxication
Feeling like trampled dirt
Because you never
Loved me.
Author notes
Contest: Nighttime Angel
Pic Inspiration
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2407231
A contest entry
- 10/20/30 QUICKIE! [PIF] by Nighttime angel.
875 points, ended May 28, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Me+Love=Pain part 2 by GypsyEyes.
300 points, ended June 9, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - From the heart by Missing.His.Kisses.
550 points, ended July 10, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell Me How You Feel..
Comments
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this is greatly written you can feel the words into yourself
congrests on getting bronze in the contest you entered -
me
this is just perfect i mean like this just hits me completely with how i feel
perfect illustration
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Great
Simple & to the point. I like how you have managed to put some many emotions into such a small poem. Good job. Good lucky -
well damn i hear you on this one! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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i'm not going to agree with everyone here.
i'm not feeling anything in this poem.
if you elaborated more it could have the potential to be better,
and the picture kind of ruins the poem.
but that's what i think.
some of your other poems are okay.
but this poem seems a tiny bit too whiny for me.
good luck writing.
-monica -
Intense feelings here....Like it..Congrats on the HM!
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wow... I really loved it.. I would tell you my favorite part but I loved all of it so I can't.
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Take my breath awayyyy... ayyy.. ayyy.. -- Top Gun song lol that's what song came to mind here. Beautiful imagery here sis, and meaning I can definately relate to as I'm going through now.
Good write!! & good luck in the contest
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WOW....take my breath away! This is going to be one hell of a contest! I count two winners so far! (not including me) I wish you the best of luck. A deep poem of emotions.
~Kystal Angel
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Your words here speak volumes ~ I loved this take on the prompt ~ best of luck in the contest hun
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this is a very powerful poem. you have penned pain quite well. the imagery that you have used is outstanding. the feelings of being rejected by the one you thought loved you but didn't. its a painful feeling, that aches right down deep inside. you did an excellent job with the prompt.
good luck
kat
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yup, rejection just about does that, doesn't it. You used really intense words to bring alive your imagery! good job, hija
your writing is very powerful and always captivatinG!
mum
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Oh wowwww this was so expressive.. who knew a wordless poem could be so brilliant? Haha its the invisible poem.. now lets see what the ink spills... maybe audrey hepburn's mom or a little maid mist
Good luck jack
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