When the children are grown
and we're all alone
Choose me
When you're finally free
to leave her and be with me
Choose me
When your hand reaches out
making love to me it will be about
Choose me
When you rock in your chair
on the porch with gray hair
Choose me
When my life comes to its end
I'll still love you and then
Choose you
Author notes
"all wrong" When being right is wrong
Sometimes you have to wait for the wrong to be right!
A contest entry
- All wrong More options added!!!! by toomysterious.
575 points, ended June 5, 2008, 6 entries
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Comments
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Excellent take on the prompt--
I admire the repetition closing each stanza with the title "Choose Me" until the conclusion--"Choose You"
Very creative & Well Crafted!
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When the children are grown
and we're all alone
Choose me
It's the biggest fear of so many couple that when the children leave there will be no more in common and all will wither away. This is such a sad, but heartfelt poem. Well written. Loved it! -
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Thanks again for commenting on my poetry! This one is something that I believe we think about at one time or the other in our relationships...hopefully the ending is sitting in our rocking chairs together always!!
darlintlc
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Sometimes you have to wait for the wrong to be right, true, and sometimes there is no right answer. This is what I got from your poem, always so many choices. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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You got it!! This is a wonderful contest..thanks for having it!
darlintlc
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Such a sad poem! The situation is always found out and always ends badly! Everyone is hurt and even if the two get together it never truly feels right. To much bad karma and history involved. Believe me! I speak from experience with this subject. As for the poem I do love the feeling of hope and longing though.
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You're so right on about that!! You are just getting someone else's problem...been there too! Thanks for reading!
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Deep and very very thought-provoking. I love this. There is so much meaning behind these words.
Good luck in the contest.
With
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
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I was reading a very sweet poem you wrote for one of your friends while you were reading one of my poems...cool!!!
Thanks for commenting and your kind words to keep me writing!!
your friend
darlintlc
xxxooo
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