Days slipping
Through fingertips
Dripping down through the cracks of eternity
Into the unknown
Fading away
Before they've been lived
The sound of explosions
Lingering in the air
The pulling of triggers
Anxiety awaits
The blackness
Spreading
Engulfing
The last of the light
Eyes closing
Never to open
A heart's beating
Stopped before it's worn out
Lives ending
Before starting
It's fate
Our fate
A chance
We never took
The darkness is rushing by
Taking everything in
Our souls
Our lives
Our mistakes
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Author notes
It might be kind of confusing, it was a way for me to let my thoughts roll out. It felt like a release, so I hope it wasn't too hard to understand.
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[+] misakes we never dared to correct [+]
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"LIngering in the air"
~ "Lingering" =]
"Stopped befor it's worn out"
~ "before" =]
Oooh, I like this. I feel... a sense of guilt, somewhat? x_X I like how it makes us think of our mistakes and the outcomes or would-be outcomes of them. -
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Thanks!
I am REALLY glad you liked it! And yeah, when I was writing it I also did feel some guilt. I guess sometimes we make mistakes, and that okay, but when we don't correct them, then we've got a problem. This poem was kind of a way to get my "confusion" I guess you could say, out.
Well Thanks for reading & I'm glad you enjoyed it!
P.S. Thanks for the tips with the writing, guess I missed that when I was reading it! Always good to have an editor!
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Hehe, no problem. I just have urges to tell people anyways. :]
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cool i really dig it
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YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEY!! i am glad you liked it! I wrote it in like 3 minutes, kind of a way to vent out my anger/ confusion. And it ended up turning out somewhat good so I posted it.
Thanks again!
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Good.
This is pretty good. I love the twists and turns in your thoughts, it makes it your own, and also makes the reader think =)
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Thanks! I am glad you liked it! I can see the twists and turns now!
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