Spiraling down an acidic lane
tumbling through drifts of colors
in pain
bleeding in purple instead of red
hardly awake
more than anything dead
splinters in hands
beer on the clothes
liquid opium split in viles
cocaine in rows
just once more he said
just once more of the old acid trip
where greens and blues and yellows mixed
there on the old worn down sofa
there's where he seduced her
just once more baby
c'mon one more line
don't worry about tomorrow
you'll make it to work in time
down into the powder
that delivered absolute power
she snorted the small white grains
one more shot, one more shot
just one more shot of heroin through your veins
it'll be a good time, it'll be a good time
when we all sit down to smoke "mary-jane"
one more ride, one more ride
we'll take you straight home
just one, just one, just one,
no time at all was that little ride done
breathe, just breathe
everything will be fine
breathe, just breathe
it will all be o-kay
what lies, oh what lies
reached her ears and heart
what lies, what lies
oh what morbid art
did she see
just once. just once
words she'll never forget
no baby, no baby
unspoken thoughts that she'll always regret
A contest entry
- TELL ME WHAT YOU SEE by Whispering Wind.
500 points, ended June 11, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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WOW! Crystal, this poem is amazing. It's very powerful nad full of emotion. keep up the good work hun love ya.
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wow! your words pull the tears from the heart...regrets from actions done, faith lost with no return...has the feeling of a song that awakens the heart to its true pain...niaish for sharing with me and for entering
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i like the repetition of words at the end. it adds to the deeper emotion portrayed earlier in the piece.
well done.
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this one is painful to read.. to know that there is so much hurt that was never expressed. its all built up inside of you.. only this poem is a small taste of the pain that created this write... sorry if im not making any sense.. but damn this poem is a hurtful one
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very deep and painfully emotion filled...keep up the great work
peace, love, & cheese -
I SEE:...
...thoughts that are unspoken. Deep... very deep and beautiful. I hope this poem wins. You're very gifted. keep up the good work.
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