Tell me Darling
Love, baby, My sweet
Did you mean to leave me yearning
For your touch, for our lips to meet?
Did you purposefully take my heart,
Rip it and return it broken?
You must have known from the start
How you would hurt me again and again.
You slept around you evil bitch
You left me lonely at night
You said that you loved me
Yet there was always a constant fight
I tried to give you everything
I though that I was strong
You beat me all the time
And left me; that was wrong
Now look who's back on bended knees
Wanting me to give more
I laugh and great you with a smack
And say keep your hands off me you evil whore
Author notes
Dear Amanda... hope you like this poem!
A contest entry
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1142 points, ended June 5, 2008, 27 entries
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eh.... It was alright. You surely could've checked your grammar and used more imagery or a good metaphor... I found this kinda cliche, to be honest. Something you may want to fix:
"Yet their was always a constant fight"
^^^"their" should be "there"...
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thanx. Sometimes grammer is hard for bme because of my dislexia I get so confused. I appreciate your comment. And noe offense but this isnt cliche, it is based off of true events. It is not a prart of my life, but in a dear friends life.
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This reminds me a little of Amanda and I. lol I love LOVE ths!!
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omg i love this
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thanx
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