To satisfy your every yearn
every desire...
My love available to earn.
To remember your every word,
every sentence...
With you i'm never bored.
To contemplate your every touch,
every feel...
To be around you i miss so much.
To endulge your every gift,
every offer...
Your spirits i will lift.
To become your every fantasy,
every want..
What the future holds we'll wait and see.
...and hopefully someday i'm your "one to be"...
Author notes
Dedicated to Godslayer
A contest entry
- The best of the best by Godslayer.
308 points, ended May 29, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
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TELL ME HOW YOU LIKE MY POEM AND WHAT MAKES IT GOOD!
Comments
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Now that's what I call one woman who knows what she wants, and a lovely description of free spirited.
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this poem is so sweet. goes into the depth of what only some people find in the world and its absolutely beautiful. short and simple yet deep in meaning. nice write
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ok
well i liked it alot the lines kinda flowed some did some didn't
the rhymes were ok could have been better
The title really made me read it i didn't understand why you name it so until the end.
I loved the ending by the way, too.
all in all very well done
thank you for sharing your peom with me
i enjoyed it very much
oh congrats on winning Gold
keep up the great work
i will be checking up soon on some more work ok
so til then bye -
What makes it good, eh? Definitely the repetitive format. I like how each stanza started with "To...." The rhymes and near-rhymes were also very good and didn't sound forced at all.
When I first read the title, I was like WTF? But the end of this poem made it awesome. Great write!
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