As the wolf brings his head up towards the sky
and see the colors dance about in triumph
The Northern lights in dance is what we see
but to the wolf it is a symbol of how simple the world was.
A contest entry
- TELL ME WHAT YOU SEE by Whispering Wind.
500 points, ended June 11, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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nicely impressive short write, the use of imagery is particularly evocative and i do like the personification of the northern lights dancing. one suggestion if i may? to me the final line seems overlong and mars the flow of what is quite a tight structure. overall i did like this and could really visualise what you were describing. cheers.
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que bonita!
what a brilliantly unique take on the picture...you are so creative!!
a few suggestions...maybe
1. there should be a 'u' in aurora
2. I think it would flow better if you said:
"The wolf brings his head up towards the sky
and sees colors gleam in triumph.
We see the Northern lights dance
but to the wolf it is a symbol of the world's simplicity"
maybe(?) these are just my thoughts....
use them, some, or none, won't hurt me, I don't want to take away from the message you are trying to portray....
a lovely little dottle though
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Superb
Aye, 'tis a fine short write. I like your imagery. Thanks for sharing this one. Again, very well done. -
Wow! Awesome Poem
The wolf is well respected, smart and he is a symbol of ckeverness. May the spirit rise to meet and guide your path...aquene....
novy
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SWEET
This is wonderful...the soft Northern Lights dancing within the wolf's world, a symbol of great triumph...a very enjoyable read niaish for sharing with me and for entering
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so beautifuly put my dear
good luck to you in the contest
very deserving i think of a medal.
Fire
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