Good morrow Ace, it is I, ssssselfish ignorant ssssself,
you will remember me from such situations assss
“To hell with them”; indeed a unifying performance and
the unforgettable comedy “Comeuppance????”.
Old friend, my arms are yours to command,
Forever I endeavour to serve beyond all measure,
Never taking a moments rest as I endlessly pursue,
Day and night with all might to bring earthly delights,
Straight to you, for the axiom of me my lord; is you.
Yeah you’re right, why am I speaking like this? Sheesh.
I am here to tell you how to get what you want,
when you want, how you want, and the best thing is,
you don’t need to worry about a god damn thing.
Minimum effort; maximum pleasure.
Can I get an amenhotep?
Hellelujah.
Do you see this?
You’re the only number in my phone,
I am all about you,
Hell; I am you, hahaha.
So what do you want?
Ah, ok, I am all over it.
You know the most efficient way to get that?
Quickest way from point ‘have not’ to point ‘have’ is straight line baby.
We get Euclidean on their ass.
Bypassing that psuedo moral crap,
Because who said thinking of just yourself is immoral?
Wasn’t me, scouts honour.
Yeah, like that, see, quick and easy,
This is what I am here for,
You, you and you,
God damn, I want to kiss myself.
What?
That’s their problem, don’t waste your time thinking about them.
Why should you go without because of them?
They would do exactly the same to you, remember that.
Oh that, oh ignore that, it’s probably indigestion or something,
Don’t worry about that, it doesn’t matter,
Few drinks will get rid of that.
Stay focused on me.
All I ask for is the willingness to try, that’s all.
You know I care for you
Here to help and serve you
What you want is what I can help you get,
Every single tim……. Who the hell are you?
Who am I?
My hands reveal all truths,
I’m on the tongue of all clocks,
I’m the fourth dimensional sign,
And I bury all epochs,
Every decision faced,
Splits lines of mine,
And I’m here to announce,
You’re in for a shock,
For the pit you dug,
You can not climb,
The seeds of this future,
Are so far behind,
Swept cause under rugs,
Are about to chime,
Feedback effects,
From your crimes,
I am the ultimate harbinger,
Announcing Great Levellers time.
Ahhhh ignore the old goat,
Senile old fool,
He’d forget his hands if they weren’t screwed on,
Besides he is selfish, takes takes takes.
Come on, you know me, I’ve been with you from the start,
When have I ever let you down,
I have always delivered that which you seek,
Those endless nights when you were alone,
it’s been me, it has always been me.
When every body leaves you, rotting in pain,
I have always done my best
To remove it as quickly as possible becua…...
Great Leveller?
Ah that’s all rubbish, superstitious goody two shoes,
Pumpkin pie ginger beer strawberries and cream hullabaloo.
There is no Great Leveller, life isn’t like that.
Life’s about fighting, it’s about looking after yourself,
It’s me against the whole world and
They will all kneel to me.
As I wasssss………
Who the devil are you?
Karma?
That’s nice,
Well why don’t you calmly get lost?
What do you mean you got something for us?
Meal for one, served very cold????
Are you asking for trouble?
Listen I …………
SILENCE !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I am the Great Leveller,
Newton’s third as an undulation in the aether,
Offshoot of the primal distortion of the law of one,
Descended from the proclamation of free will,
I am the inverted power to inertia,
X to the power of minus 1,
I fed Pooh Tao and Piglet Te,
Relieved Confucius of his confusion,
Gave Zen Buddhists lessons in motor cycle maintenance,
and lonely ying a yang;
I bring balance to the polarized,
and Direction to The Way,
Hidden lessons to the ignorant,
Beyond the subjective perception,
And I give you that what you gave.
Uhhhh, this is horrible,
Quick lets run, you don’t need to go through anything you don’t want.
Your crimes you need not pay,
and rebounds, hey, rebounds need someone to rebound to,
so we take ourselves away after we bound them first,
So come on, let’s run.
Where you going, come back here, COME BACK !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Huh.
He’ll be back, they always come back. But in the mean time……
Good morrow Reader, it is I, ssssselfish ignorant ssssself,
The world is our oyster,
Do as I say and we can leave
Empty shells littered in our wake.
What do you say?
Author notes
Contest Character Sketch
Normal text: Selfish self (Flesh / Ego)
Italic text: Time
Bold text: Karma
"amenhotep" (Amenhotep IV: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Akhenaten)
"Euclidean" (Euclidean Geometry: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Euclidean_geometry)
Newtons Third: "Newtons Third Law of Motion: Every action has an equal and opposite reaction"
(http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Newton's_laws_of_motion)
"Pooh Tao" (Hoff B., 1982, The Tao of Pooh, London Magnet 1986, London)
"Piglet Te" (Hoff B., 1992, The Te of Piglet, Egmont Books Ltd, London)
"Zen Buddhists lessons in motor cycle maintenance" (Pirsig R.,1974, Zen and the Art of Motor Cycle Maintenance, Perennial, New York, N.Y.)
A contest entry
- Inspiration by HellRaiser21.
500 points, ended June 18, 29 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - your personal best by indomitable.
600 points, ended July 7, 43 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Happy random power by Nalyn the Melon.
500 points, ended July 5, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
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625 points, ended July 11, 37 entries
Silver trophy winner
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1500 points, ended July 8, 67 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your favorite Prewrite by BorntothePurple.
875 points, ended August 9, 126 entries
Honorable winner
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300 points, ended August 5, 23 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Wow, AWesome! Amazing! Very different, out of the box, I would say.
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I stumbled upon your page, after reading a reply to a comment i wrote on another piece. then i recognized the title of this one, and realized you entered it into on of my contests. I have to say, looking at my previous comment on this, i feel a little ashamed. I re-read this, and (maybe i payed more attention this time, or am in a better mood, but i digress) this is fantastic. the first part, before ego is interrupted could be a poem in itself. I love how even though ego is the only one speaking, i can see the internal dialogue: the back and forth.
my favorite lines of egos grand entrance:
Quickest way from point ‘have not’ to point ‘have’ is straight line baby.
We get Euclidean on their ass.
also, the introduction of time, as a precursor to introducing karma flows in effortlessly. you could have just brought karma in now, but having ego respond back (what a smartass) just reinforces how egotistical (haha) the ego is.
The capitalization of karma's first sentence, had the effect you intended. I could literally hear karmas big thunderous "voice" coming to dole out punishment.
Every part of this piece connects, and sends out a clear message.
great write
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Hm, I like where you were going with this. It works because its true, we allow ourselves to listen to ourselves way too much instead of that which we truly know what we should do. We follow the advice, even though that advice is unwarranted, and yet we believe it is.
If only we would listen to morals instead of wants,
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okay,this was a little, well a lot long for my taste. the only thing i can tell about your character, is that they are schizophrenic. (my interpretation). i never try and be outright mean when i critique, but i just dont enjoy this.
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Remarkable friend!!!!
I was wanting more through the entire piece
You have delivered perfection
This was awesome and interesting all wrapped in one
You have done well
Pefection!
Thank you for the read
Most deserved with the trophies
TT
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Wow this was a marathon read but quite an interesting little monologue with ones many sides, interesting word choice, am very glad you included some author notes for those of us who are a little dense. Well done, best to you
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Hello AutumnGypsy. Thank you for reading such a long piece, for it is indeed quite a marathon. I do appreciate that. Regarding the selves. There is only one self in this; Selfish ignorant self (flesh/ego normal text), the others are time (italic text), and Karma (bold text). My regards.
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My, oh, my...What a conversation to have with one's self or is it selves? Almost thought you were in a schizoid mood when you wrote this. (lol). Very well written, indeed. Does remind me of past conversations I had with myself when I was going through some deep depression years ago. By which, I am no longer bothered. Very well written, indeed. -
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Hello Trafalger679Curious. Thank you for reading and commenting on such a long piece. I am glad to read that you found it contained some positives. Schizoid mood? You mean this isn't normal? Hhahahaa. Well the entities in this write are; selfish self (flesh/ego, normal font), time (the italic font), and Karma (bold font). Many thanks for your kind words and compliments. Have you any works of yours in particular you would like me to check out? My regards.
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I did a series of poems about war. One of which is called: 'Blues of Night', a link in a moment:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4301709
I've put my entire collection into various lists, so if any topic catches your fancy you can, obviously, just click on: "Next in list".
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I see that you have a long line of trophys lining the bottom of this page. So you already know how good it is! I love how the voice of evil comes off sometimes like a snake, very biblical! You have obviously spent time on this poem making it flawless. I wouldnt change a thing.
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Hello Sarah957. Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. I am glad to read that you found some positives within this write. Many thanks indeed for reading such a long piece. My regards.
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I don't understand why this was not a contest winner. I found myself moving closer to my computer screen to ensure I didn't miss anything, like sitting on the edge of my seat. The time you must have taken to imagine the conversations that toook place in this piece amazes me. I loved the language changes, the flow and the imagery you so cleverly displayed.
"I am the inverted power to inertia,
X to the power of minus 1,
I fed Pooh Tao and Piglet Te,
Relieved Confucius of his confusion,
Gave Zen Buddhists lessons in motor cycle maintenance,
and lonely ying a yang;
I bring balance to the polarized,
and Direction to The Way,
Hidden lessons to the ignorant,
Beyond the subjective perception,
And I give you that what you gave"...very powerful and definately words to get someones attention!!!
"every decision faced,
Splits lines of mine,
And I’m here to announce,
You’re in for a shock,
For the pit you dug,
You can not climb,
The seeds of this future,
Are so far behind,
Swept cause under rugs,
Are about to chime,
Feedback effects,
From your crimes"...again very powerful, thought provoking and clever.
I have great appreciation for the talent exposed from this piece. Well done.
Shelly
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Hello Nevedapoet.
Thank you for reading and commenting on such a long piece. The original contest it was written for, a cause and effect contest; the contest holder obviously didn't think it was good enough for whatever reason, hahaha. But it has done very well since then, hahahah. That first part you quoted, matter of minutes, it's just getting into the mind set which can take a bit of time. As for the second quoted extract, that all revolved around the sounds of time and tock or clock (same thing though, ahahaa). I am glad to read that you found this to your liking. Many thanks for your kind words, and once again, for reading such a long piece.
My regards.
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I must admit that I found myself having to reread this many times just to see if I was missing anything. You have put a lot of thought into this which is obvious. A very interesting and thought provoking poem, and nicely written. Thanks so much for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty
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Hello Paw-writer. Thank you very much indeed for reading and commenting on such a long piece. Also thank you for your kind words and compliments as well. You are welcome pertaining to me entering your contest. My regards.
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I am so glad that you entered this contest
with this poem! I have never come across
it before and am glad that I did tonight.
I really enjoyed reading it and I can see
why you won so many trophies for it. Well
done and congratulations to you! I hope
that you do well with it in this contest
as well! Good luck and keep up the wonderful
work here!
Jeremy0826
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!!!!! lol...wow...that was intense..longest poem i ever read...i love it..the conversation..the mult character..the intesting dialogue..wonderful.creative..imaginative..nice jbo!!!,,.,just hitting u w/ all the praises...lol..good luck in the contest
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Hello Crivanea.
First of all thank you very much for reading and commenting on such a long piece. I am very glad to read that you found some positives within it. Thank you for your kind word and compliments, as well as the Gold Trophy, and also thank you for adding me as a favourite. Many thanks once again.
My regards.
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Hmmm. I like this: It's Satan talking, right? Or is it just the selfish "self" - I framed this as a dialog between Satan and God, talking to an individual human soul, the hiss in the beginning, like a snake, made me think of that.
I like a good poem that makes me think. I do, however, feel this could use a bit of editing at times, but that's up to you. This is definitely a great poem, and it is very deserving of the trophies it won. Thanks a lot for entering my contest.
With 100 plus more poems to read, I wish I could go through this line by line and really give it the commentary it deserves, but I have to get on with my reading and judgeing. But this is one that will stick in my mind long after this contest is over.
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Hello BorntothePurple.
Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece, and for awarding me an Honourable Mention. Regarding your questions; it is the selfish self, which I have obviously presented as Satan. The dialogue is between the selfish self, and the person it resides in (Ace). Time is also in here (the italic font), and Karma (the bold font).
Regarding the editing, such a long piece may well benefit from editing, especially as my skill increases, so perhaps some day, depends how I feel on that day, hahaha. You did indeed have a lot of entries, and it shows character to want to comment on them all. Thank you for your kind words and compliments regarding this piece, and once again for the Honourable Mention.
My regards.
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This is a very good poem, i must admit i am confused and this poem is rather complex with different levels and its hard to follow it all, and i was not sure with what was going on but that is just myself im sure most others love it, best of luck in my contest,
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Hello Lost Vampyre Angel. Thank you for reading this long piece, although I do admit I am puzzled by your remarks, as they are vastly different from what you said last time, although I can see obscure leading to confusing, and complex, thus hard to follow.
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wow this is amazing, i love this so so much,
this is was so obscure yet so damn amazing,
from the start to finish you had me captivated into your poem, your wording throughout the poem is flawless
Uhhhh, this is horrible,
Quick lets run, you don’t need to go through anything you don’t want.
Your crimes you need not pay,
and rebounds, hey, rebounds need someone to rebound to,
so we take ourselves away after we bound them first,
So come on, let’s run.
this part just struck me like lightening,
all the best,
love kitty xxx "
Anyway, once again thank you for reading this. My regards.
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it was probably rereading things. plus since then i have been studying different types of poetry and found out more about what i like, dislike ect sorry for the confusion
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Hello Lost Vampyre Angel. Thank you for the reply, and for clarifying. Not a problem, pertaining to the confusion. My regards
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I love the overall unusualnees of this conversational masterpiece! Very conflicted, yet when one delves in upon another glance... there doesn't seem to be that much of a conflict as what first seems. very well played out and loved the ending you gave to this.
your a contest finalist!
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i love this think you did a very great job good luck to you in the contest with the others
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Hello Theredcatjazzoflove. Thank you for reading and your kind words regarding this long piece. My regards.
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Oops, forgot this.
Total- 30/50 or 60% -
Thank you for entering my contest and following all the rules.
Your score:
-flow ( 4/10 )
-subject ( 7/10 )
-fitting title ( 4/5 )
-word choice ( 3/5 )
-originality ( 8/10 )
-spelling and grammar ( 2/5 )
-how much I like it, basically. ( 2/5 )
I found this extremely confusing. Your use of punctuation in this was very childish seeming at times, word choice also. I did not really understand this, at all. -
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Hello Wonderbandalice. Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. I am aware that there are some things that people will not understand, and find extremely confusing. It is a long piece, and I thank you for reading and commenting on it once again. My regards.
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Hello Makenzie. Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. It certainly is unique, hahaha. Once again, thank you. My regards.
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Excellent
I normally cringe at long writes but as you had been so kind as to comment on my work I stuck wih it.Well stuck with it is doing you a mis-service beacause this was an excellent piece of writing that had so much to say, Ros
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Hello Gwenevere. First of all thank you for reading such a long piece, for it is indeed a long write. Thank you also for your kind words regarding this piece, I am glad that you found it an excellent write. Many thanks, and my regards.
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OOOOH MY! this is awesome!!! I absolutely adore the conversation that prevails through out the poem...You have written a truly fantastic poem, and I can totally see why it's been awarded so many trophies!
And I really just love how the poem ends....lmao!
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Hello Luckintheshadows. Thank you very much for awarding me the Silver Trophy; I am honoured. My regards.
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Hello Luckintheshadows.
Thank you for reading this, as I do know it is a long piece. I am very glad to read that you found this to be awesome, fantastic, and other kind words and compliments you have given. Yeah, I like the ending myself, but then, I would say that, ahhahah. You are welcome pertaining to me sharing this piece, and for entering into your contest.
My regards.
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First of all, this was quite a read.
I didn't think I'd end up reading a whole story
At first I was like..."wow, i'm going to read all of this and hate every second of it" But no, it didn't turn out that way.
There were some parts that confused me and I wanted to know what you meant, exactly, but it was all very good. There's some of us who like writing/reading long stuff, then there's some who don't.
I'm a bit in the middle. I could handle this
I sensed some sort of big ego throughout this all. Some parts seemed sarcastic, others questionable, then some of the parts seemed serious. There were parts that sounded like some salesman trying to sell a great product of theirs that'll change your life forever (can't quite describe it). There were some lines where I sensed a total smart ass of a poet, others I could see some heart
If this makes any sense...this is like a random personality poem There are many sides that I can see it as.
This is different from all of the other entries, I believe. I don't think I've ever read a poem like this then again, to be honest.
I like how you repeat "it is I, ssssselfish ignorant ssssself," You have it once at the beginning, and then you change it a bit at the end.
There's so much creativity found in this, behind the words, behind all those long stanzas.
This is definitely my fav part of this poem...
"Who am I?
My hands reveal all truths,
I’m on the tongue of all clocks,
I’m the fourth dimensional sign,
And I bury all epochs,
Every decision faced,
Splits lines of mine,
And I’m here to announce,
You’re in for a shock,
For the pit you dug,
You can not climb,
The seeds of this future,
Are so far behind,
Swept cause under rugs,
Are about to chime,
Feedback effects,
From your crimes,
I am the ultimate harbinger,
Announcing Great Levellers time."
I find nothing but brilliance within that stanza.
How did you come up with this?
Thank you for entering my contest.
Sincerely,
dovey ~
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Hello Poetrydove.
Thank you reading and commenting on this for it indeed is a long piece. The majority of the poem, the words in normal text is meant to be flesh/ego, so “big ego” sensed well. It was written in a sales ‘too good to be true, no strings attached’ type of way, as well as skewed thoughts and an undercurrent of not being ‘right’, in terms of selfish, no consideration or responsibility, etc, etc.
The bold part is Karma, who I gave a sense of grandiose, just seemed fitting.
The part in italic, your fav part is meant to be ‘time’ who talks about itself, bit of quantum mechanics thrown in, but mostly its about cause and effect, and the coming of Karma, which is of course related to causality. It all started off with “Tick Tock Tick Tock”, which I took out once a certain proportion of that stanza was written, but the strict rhythm obviously remained; which was the intention for it seemed absurd not to have ‘time’s stanza possessing strict rhythm and rhyme around a recurring phonetic sound, that sound being ‘tock’ and ‘time’.
You are more than welcome pertaining to me entering your contest, and thank you for reading and commenting on this piece.
My regards.
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Congratulations for winning once more.
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Hello Nalyn. Thank you very much. My regards.
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I think this should have hundreds of golds attached to it..what a fascinating read.
some could say long...i say I could have read more and more
splendid
Cindy
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Hello Cinfully Delicious. Thank you for your kind words regarding this piece. I am very glad to read that you found this a fascinating read. Also thank you for awarding me the Silver Trophy in your contest. My regards.
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Hello Lowercase Prelude. Thank you for your kind words and compliments regarding this piece. I am glad to read that you found this an amazing epic. Also thank you for awarding me the Silver Trophy in your contest. My regards.
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I like it, it makes me smile and it's very inspirational in a very strange andn ot yet before captured way.
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Hello Midnight-x-Rose. Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. I am glad that you found it inspirational and made you smile. My regards.
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WOW - I can see why this took the Gold!! Outstanding in wording and depth. Longer than I usually can stay awake for...lol...but this kept me awake all the way through. I especially liked,
'Who am I?
My hands reveal all truths,
I’m on the tongue of all clocks,
I’m the fourth dimensional sign,
And I bury all epochs,
Every decision faced,
Splits lines of mine'
and also your ending -
'The world is our oyster,
Do as I say and we can leave
Empty shells littered in our wake.' - powerful ending.
Well done!!
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Hello Aboomer. Thank you for reading this very long piece. I am very glad to read that you liked this, and that it managed to keep you awake, ahhaha. Once again thank you. My regards.
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*____* oy.
This IS Happy, random, and very powerful. I love it.
The length and power is amazing. Hell no; DQing this is like taking off the ice cream in an ice cream cone.
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Hello Nalyn. Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. I am very glad to read that you found it a powerful write. Also thank you for awarding me the Gold Trophy; I am honoured. My regards.
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bwahahaha! this is truly remarkable. no doubt about it, its hilarious, wicked, too true for comfort, and all around fabulous. i love the form of it, the inner war was captured sooo damn well. i adore your choices of words, nothing humdrum, every one of them seemed carefully chosen for impact, clarity, and interest. youve done a great job with this one, ill be sure to read more of your work, this really is good.
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Hello Indomitable. Thank you very much for your kind words. I am very glad to read that you found this such a remarkable write, as well as finding many other positives within it. I would of course, also like to thank you for awarding me the Silver Trophy in your contest. Many thanks, and my regards.
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WOW!
Fantastic!
--applaudes performance-- Good Job I enjoy reading this even if its long =] Good luck <333
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Hello ElegantlyDangerous. Many thanks for reading and commenting on this piece. I am very glad to read that you liked it as much as you did. My regards.
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Finalist and most likely the winner, amazing, gave me inspiration for a poem!
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Hello HellRaiser21. First of all thank you very much for the Gold Trophy. I am honoured. I am very glad that you liked this piece and found it amazing. I hope it does indeed inspire you. Once again, thank you, and my regards.
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Old friend, my arms are yours to command,
Forever I endeavour to serve beyond all measure,
Never taking a moments rest as I endlessly pursue,
Day and night with all might to bring earthly delights,
Straight to you, for the axiom of me my lord; is you.
I like that part,
this is really good and deep.
I like it in general.
Good right.
. Rewarded 6
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Hello MysticMoonAngel. Thank you very much for reading and commenting on this piece. I am very glad that you liked it in general, and liked whatever parts you liked. My regards.
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sounds like the morning after a heavy night on the wine!
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Hello Frownsnfreckles. Thank you for the applause, as well as taking the time to read and comment. My regards.
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I hate to say this, but it carried on far too long for my tastes. I mean, I read it all (what piece of crap, self-proclaimed judge wouldn't?), but I wasn't very happy about it (at first).
On that note, I was very happy getting to around the three fourths point, you know? There was an almost lyrical shift there, gone from blatent salesmanship to enticingly beautiful wordplay. Sure, the length of your poem adds to its charm of feeling lifelong, but hitting this piece adds to question why any of the rest was needed except for filler buildup.
And then it ended on the same note it started, on to the next victim. I liked that.
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Hello Zixaphir. Don't hate to say anything man, not a problem at all. I appreciate you reading it and leaving a comment. People like what they like, like the parts they like, etc, that is their right and nothing to do with me.
As for the blatant salesmanship, that was what I wanted the flesh/ego self to be seen like, all empty promises, no strings attached, etc, etc. The story needs start, end, transition. Without the buildup there is no drop, no understanding of where the character came from, what happened etc., etc., thus a lack of appreciation as to the journey of the character into how he gets sucked into a certain way of being. The reader needs to get drawn into the ego's way of thinking. Then you get the effects and see how ego then tries to ignore guilt (by ignoring) and more pleasure seeking, as well as other methods of justification. Then time announcing karma is coming, and a delay was needed here very specifically. Then some more recommendations from ego, finally karma doing what it does, then ego trying once more.
Anyway man, like I said not a problem. I am glad that you liked the parts you liked, and of course grateful for you taking the time to read and comment.
My regards.
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WOW!
Fantastic!
--applaudes performance--
I like to ignore long poems but I kept reading, then got sucked in, then sure as enjoyed the show!
I enjoy all the complexities of this, it is simply magnificent, I am just - wowed. Wow.
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. Rewarded 6
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Hello TheSilverQuill.
Yes it is a rather long poem, but thank you very much for sticking with it. Thank you for the applause, and also for your kind words, and compliments. I am very glad to read that you enjoyed the show, as well as the complexities within this piece, and the "Wow"'s, ahahha.
Once again many thanks. My regards.
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Cleverly done!
Written cleverly with many layers to enjoy.
I'm sure readers all took their own prompts and triggers
from this poem.
Uniquely and smartly done!
way to write!
ears/Seattle
. Rewarded 4
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Hello Ears2hearyou.
Many thanks for reading this piece, as I obviously know it is a long one, and for your kind words and compliments. I do agree there are many layers to this piece, and am glad that you enjoyed which ever one's you did. Yes; each reader will find certain parts resonate more, certain parts funnier, etc. Once again thank you very much.
My regards.
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