Oh God
your genius to denote the facts
and my know-how to perceive the rightness
are two distinct realities
not equalizing with one another
though, it is definite that my evaluation day is one
only when I evacuate this globe after the winding up of my life
however, when you are definite that
I am enduring my life as an inorganic material
then, undoubtedly, you are caused to effect
a day of my valuation even in the lifetime of mine
Oh God...
Author notes
Prompt...
Feel free to write your own. Keep in mind though, that it must make me think and make me feel. It must
be deep and not superficial...
It is said that the judgement day is one and that comes after the death..and to me God can judge us even in our lifetime if we are living like a dead.
In a list
A contest entry
- Something inspiring (Now accepting prewrites) by WatchingStars.
441 points, ended June 14, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I ask these questions my self, but as far as god (in my understanding nature)
I feel the serene indifference of Krishna. I love nature and it’s who cares attitude.
Today I am in great pain but nature leaves me with options, infinite options.
Let nature judge me, or Krishna, I ask questions, many questions, isn’t that what nature intends?
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Excellent
Intriguing, somewhat enigmatic and yet I feel that I can relate to the message therein. Very well written, indeed. -
It's nice to read something inspirational once in awhile over the usual dreary things you read (or write, like myself!) Good work
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i love the word choices here. this really made me think. nice look at life. good job and good luck!
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A clever title. I think you are speaking about the duality of things though there is probably a lot more to it.
Interesting write as always.
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You know God no doubt- your poetry speaks as one who is a friend to God. Good luck in contest
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My friend, you are fast becoming a mentor of mine, as I watch you explore your faith in such colorful writes like this.
"though, it is definite that my evaluation day is one
only when I evacuate this globe after the winding up of my life"
I like how you worded this. To write it as a typical cliche would be easy but you have chosen a more creative route, well done.
"I am enduring my life as an inorganic material"
I find this line a bit of an enigma, as I've always thought about the physical and spiritual plains, and our physical bodies being organic. I'd like your to hear your take on us being "inorganic material."
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The image you chose to place with these words gave me much to ponder. It seems almost a societal write and yet it is imminently personal. We affect all around us by our actions no matter how small or if anyone sees what we do. It is still visible to HIM and we are [evaluated] by these actions. It is not HE who judges us, but our own actions judge us, valuate us, in the end. Well, this is how I read this. I always enjoy your deep thoughts, my poetic friend. Peace and best of luck in the contest. Rhonda
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God(cause) to us (effect)
evaluation day.
you wrapped this up in quite a beautiful package,
lovely write
God bless...
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Full of great wisdom,your word speaks a message all it own. Like a prayer lifted to God in a whisper but heard like thunder.
The picture you choose is a complement to your words only adding to the message.
Loved this poem!
Lifetime
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fabulous write
simply your pic is soo expressive and your lines moreEE
great write
a great message well conveyed i so like this 
good lucks in da contest i know my auntie will love your entry
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The humility of this prayer is eloquent with acceptance of the relative positions of Deity and creature. The verbalization is forthright rather than lyrical, yet seems romantic in its tone.
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Wow
I like this. And the message(along with the pic) puts across a strong message: We do need to take better care of this earth. Awesome job, Jane
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