In suicide notes
And silent dreams
Nothing is ever
What it seems.
The laws of physics
Come undone
The moon has now
Become the sun.
With crimson tears
Shed from out wrists
No longer wishing
To exist.
My tears fall silent,
It's just as well.
My life has become
A living Hell.
Surrounded by people,
I've never been so alone.
My aching heart
can't be condoned.
My silence is silver,
But death would be gold.
My blood still hot
As my breath turns cold.
A contest entry
- What Are The Sounds Of Horror Within Yourself? by theredcatjazzoflove.
700 points, ended October 10, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow
wow thats really good. you captured your feelings really well. great expressive writing. so intense for such a short piece =] well done! x -
Oh, wow.
That's vivid...
I'm gonna bookmark this, so simple, yet so effective!
Excellent write now...
If you can write as well as this, I think you should enter some of my contests, I have two or three open right now, and I'm sure you'd find something to suit you.
Amazing work. -
AMAZING!
Well done...you have captured such sadness and desperation in this poem. I love the way it flows. I can't pick out any one line because I wouldn't change a thing. It's so sad and haunting but in a beautiful way
Mariana
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this was a great piece made me tear up a bit i like the way you described the journey of the B people as myself you did a awesome job good luck in the contest
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