I can hear the whispers of the crickets
In the wind as I spin
Around in the warmth of the autumn midnight breeze
With thoughts of twilight stars in the illuminated sky
Spinning and spinning and spinning and finally…
Crash
I’m falling on my butt
And all I have are the thoughts
Of the way things used to be
On cool autumn nights
With my friends holding hands
and spinning
In the warmth of the summer sunshine
Just as the sun was going down.
Then mom would holler that it’s supper time
And our game of ring-around-the- rosies was finished.
Ahh, summer memories.
Author notes
AN Shantalina
A contest entry
- Options lots of options by Nakatrea.
600 points, ended June 15, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Ugh i'm so sick of not being able to write!!!!!!!!
Comments
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OHH I love this, it brings sucha prescence and a mood and its just a terrific write!
My favorite part was
"And all I have are the thoughts
Of the way things used to be
On cool autumn nights
With my friends holding hands
and spinning
In the warmth of the summer sunshine
Just as the sun was going down -
Indeed a imagery is filled with the music of sad tone relating with the past and which has its story behind the each image..I love its essence..just beautiful...
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i had no idea this about ring-around-the-rosy! A very nice piece of memory whether it is yours of not... I assume your authors not is your username and that the poem speaks for itself in a way.. And that you used my fabulous word bank! yay everyone is using it. I'm so happy
ANYway great write, good luck
~Kat *♥*
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"I can hear the whispers of the crickets
In the wind as I spin
Around in the warmth of the autumn midnight breeze
With thoughts of twilight stars in the illuminated sky
Spinning and spinning and spinning and finally…
Crash"
Doll, I loved that stanza.
Thanks for telling me you wrote something new <3
ily and I hope you win!
♥
~Princess of Shadows~
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