Pig ironed dual lined escape
Windswept diesel freedom flies
Carriage of dreams, courage and hope
Distance, destiny and deliverance entwined
From heartbreak station
............To
Riding a steel trained bullet
.........For love
Author notes
Credit photogragher Sailor Ptolema
Pig iron is the raw iron used to make railway tracks; well thats what we call it in aus anyway lol
A contest entry
- Great PICTURE PROMPT!! Quickie! by Sailor Ptolema.
451 points, ended June 1, 14 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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bravo!
I lOVE this....short and powerful!
you chose your diction carefully...and it shows... and I love the first line!! "Pig ironed"... so unique
and I love the form and flow...it reads quickly,
which is great b/c its about a train
so, bravo for getting that down...its minor details like that, that really make a poem More...
and I love how you ..'switch tracks' at the end...a splendid train metaphor
thanks for entering and g'luck! -
Interesting take... I like the flow of this... got a bit lost when you switched tracks (LOL) and ended up emotionally but very well done.
Ken
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taiinfinite
Thanks for your comment yes it did change tracks lol but thats what happens when you leave something for something else switching tracks, not a bad line for a poem lol
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