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Pig ironed dual lined escape

Windswept diesel freedom flies

 

 

Carriage of dreams, courage and hope

Distance, destiny and deliverance entwined

 

 

From heartbreak station

............To

 

 

Riding  a steel trained bullet

.........For love

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Credit photogragher Sailor Ptolema
Pig iron is the raw iron used to make railway tracks; well thats what we call it in aus anyway lol

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  • bravo!

    I lOVE this....short and powerful!
    you chose your diction carefully...and it shows... and I love the first line!! "Pig ironed"... so unique
    and I love the form and flow...it reads quickly,
    which is great b/c its about a train so, bravo for getting that down...its minor details like that, that really make a poem More...
    and I love how you ..'switch tracks' at the end...a splendid train metaphor
    thanks for entering and g'luck!

  • KayJay gold member
    May 31

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    Interesting take... I like the flow of this... got a bit lost when you switched tracks (LOL) and ended up emotionally but very well done.
    Ken


    • tainfinite silver member
      May 31
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      taiinfinite

      Thanks for your comment yes it did change tracks lol but thats what happens when you leave something for something else switching tracks, not a bad line for a poem lol