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Love Under The Stars

Under glaze of glowing moon

I see the sparkle in your eyes

my heart pulses with yours in tune

under night of starlit skies.

 

I see the sparkle in your eyes

your touch ignites my flame within

under night of starlit skies

let this dance of love begin.

 

Your touch ignites my flame within

my heart it flutters like a bird

let this dance of love begin

as whispered words of love are heard.

 

My heart it flutters like a bird

my heart pulses with yours in tune

as whispered words of love are heard

under gaze of glowing moon.

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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    June 26, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry

    Gaylene, lol, many of these forms are a first for you, but you have done an excelent job with this one. I feel like as I read this poem two lovers are dancing a waltz under a summer moon.

    Great job with the form, your rhyme scheme is well developed and gives a great flow to the poem.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy


  • herrlurch
    May 28, 2008
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    Very harmonic! ... and surely fun.


  • The Poetic Angel
    May 28, 2008

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    awsom i love it mum
    good luck in the contest
    xxx cheeky xxx