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Come forth...

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Awaiting.....

why... I ask of you,

do you keep us waiting,

tormented and confused.

 

I see you clearly tasting,

hunger's thirsting void.

Yet, you refuse to enter,

decision's double doors.

 

Do you fear to seek,

the unleashing.

Vulnerable feather dreams,

of flaming hopefulness.


A delightful muse,

demands attention too.

Clawing and digging,

exposing and releasing.


Fantasy's illusion,

in candlelight's confession.

Reveals the bold feminine woman,

buried deep inside you're yearnings.

 

We are your innervoice,

awaiting,

the dreams you shy to view.

Come forth,

burst through these doors,

feast upon the view! 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Contest prompt: Looking for inspiration to remove writers
block.

Dear poetess: you have many adventures still to write,
your youth and imagination are deep and dark, now let's
see what is on the other side? If you are not afraid
to peek and come inside...feast upon the view...that
eagerly awaits...stalking you.

Even the boldest of warriors, pauses to breathe,
and you are a bold fearless poetic warrior!


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  • celadia
    June 3, 2008

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    The last stanza was just superb. It shows how a shy person has to overcome things to live, I hope i'm interpreting this correctly. Just fantastic.


  • CountryCousin
    May 29, 2008

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    This is amazing.

    This is amazing poetry. One that does inspire and it is written so well. You just come in here and knock us out with this piece. I enjoyed it and found nothing to dislike.


  • unanswered
    May 28, 2008

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    Your words, this poem, was breathe taking. It was truely inspiring. The boldest warriors pause to breathe. I will remeber that.I find myself speechless and yet inspired. Thank you for entering. Good luck in the contest.

  • Sestos
    May 28, 2008

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    This is has good sounds:

    Yet, you refuse to enter,
    decision's double doors.

    I enjoyed the reaching here.


  • Rovingone gold member
    May 28, 2008

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    There is war going on here. The way the words are used, such as clawing, digging, exposing and releasing, the bold feminine buried deep inside your yearnings, yet who refuses to enter decisions double doors. subtle rhyme improves the over all play of the poem. Very good piece.


  • crimson-river
    May 28, 2008
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    awesome

    well written.
    great flow, and form...
    the picture goes with it very well.,


  • faderman1959
    May 28, 2008

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    Beautifully spoken! Women have so many layers that they hide! Thats what makes them so interesting! I love the way you say to set yourself free. Open yourself to the world and the possibilities are limitless. Such a thought provoking and wonderful poem!


  • neurosine gold member
    May 28, 2008
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    Wouldn't the subject be the view? Pervy.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    May 28, 2008

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    Maahvalous!!!

    Absolutely inspiring and outstanding work!!! I love the stunning ideas flowing within the body of this beauuuuutiful wonder!!! Excellent metaphoric surrealism and fluid imagery equal a masterpiece's living testamony of your muse's beautiful creativeness!!! Write on, shine on, and all the best of luck to you in this contest!!! Peace, Cyn


  • Lucy.
    May 28, 2008

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    What a wonderful poem for the contest! I'm sure it will work wonders. Great write

  • aaaaaaaa
    May 28, 2008
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    Very inspiring, I love the last stanza. Great work.

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