Somewhere in the sunshine
I found my faith again,
and though the walls are gray and faded,
and we're all tainted by our sins,
the walls can be refinished,
and we can be reborn,
so don't let the hardships
paint your face forlorn.
[chorus]
We all need some space for breathing,
some time for ourselves, a place to call our own;
don't even tell the world you're leaving,
just disappear from view, take some time alone.
We were made for heaven,
though first we go through hell,
but trials only brighten
the fires they don't quell.
Our scars don't make us who we are,
they're proof of where we've been,
so appreciate the moment,
and feel the light sink in.
[chorus]
I think I need some space for breathing,
some time for myself, a place to call my own;
the world won't even know I'm leaving,
I'll just disappear from view to take some time alone.
If there were room to take you with,
I'd show you the stars and teach you bliss.
But this spaceship was built for one,
so I will fly alone into the sun.
Author notes
A song! Music, too! My first! I'll be singing it on stage this fall.
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PRETTY
I think this is an awesome write, and possibly could be done as a song, possibly. Being married to a lead singer for twenty five years, and both of us writing the original songs, I would have to say that you better have a lot of breath, for the verses are so very long. I think the concept of your piece is incredible, and I hope when you sing it in the fall that it comes together, it just may!!!!!
POETDONTKNOWWIT
WRITING IT HER WAY
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cute. congrats and good luck!
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I love the poem i think its great, but i do agree with the comment below me the only problem i had with this song is the chorus doesnt flow so well mostly these lines
[chorus]
I think I need some space for breathing,
some time for myself,
a place to call my own;
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the world won't even know I'm leaving,
I'll just disappear from view,
to take some time alone.
Between :
a place to call my own;
the world won't even know I'm leaving,
just doesnt fit to well
Just my opinion
Mortikie -
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I think the problem you're both having is that you're trying to read the chorus as three groups of two lines each, when it's supposed to be two groups of three lines each.
Thanks for the read/comment.
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Its a great song, But the Chorus doesnt flow that smoothly, "The world won't even know i'm leaving" doesnt seem to flow aw well. of course, it could just be me. But overall I loved it. Let me know how it goes when you sing it!
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