I creep beneath the darkness
Hiding from the light of day
I surface in the night life
To seduce my darling prey
She’s a beauty in the rough
Her eyes shine like the sun
I ask the girl to dance
Though I almost wish she’d run
I’m engulfed in masquerade
I don’t want this dance to end
The end will spell her death
If only I could just pretend
Maybe I could love her
I’m ensnared by what could be
What a crazy little thought
To think she could love me
The dance is over, time to die
My brilliant fangs assail her neck
Like razorblades across her skin
I drink in her final breath
It’s a game that I must play
If I wish to walk this world
It was crazy for me to think
That I could ever love that girl
Author notes
Option six. From the point of view of the vampire.
My screen name is chasingwhiterabbits.
A contest entry
- [[.Courtesy of a Raven's Blood.]] by Soten-Jaganshi.
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Honorable mention
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It's not the best, but...please tell me what you think.
Comments
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I can't say i love the Title, as i would have gotten the vampire p.o.v from the actuall poem. Beyond disliking the title, i enjoyed the poem. I adore the lines:
"Maybe I could love her
I’m ensnared by what could be
What a crazy little thought
To think she could love me"
and i think it was the best-used rhyme ((though simple as it is)) in the entire piece.
Thank you for entering my contest and goodluck!
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AWSOME!!
when i seen the title i thought it would be about a vampye drink frome a wine glass and it be all scary and more write in it. When i started to read it i felt like i was the poor damn soul that had to kill the girl to servived. i could feel the girls warmth and the heart beat in her as we danced tell the end. the title was perfect, wine u have to smell it and injoy it tell you finel sip then drink its wonderful tast, its a bother when there is no more and he fall in love with its taste most of all but ppl know that to happen.
I creep beneath the darkness
Hiding from the light of day
I surface in the night life
To seduce my darling prey
this was a great way to start it off nice work. and its not that hard to seduce a DARLING pray (smile) jk.
it was perfect nice work u should to another just like this....what happens after this drink and where does he go?
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