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Failure of a Savior

You took her heart and held it close
You gave her dreams and made them real
But you walked away and let her die
And I took the chance live her life

You can't save her
You're no Savior

You think it is her you speak to so violently
You don't know it is really me
She gave her soul and took her own life
You made the mistake not to make it right

You can't save her
You're no Savior
I took the chance and became her
You can't save her
You're no Savior

She's not here any more
She's on the other side
It is you she is waiting for

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  • Redrusty66
    June 9

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    Great work, nice imagery and use of wordplay. The subject matter was wide and inspired ample room for personal perspective. Thanks for the great read
  • pithyaplomb
    May 31
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    The duality you have expressed is as about as awesome as it ever gets!!! and for that, you are by all and every means a final contestant on the ape is right!
    Take care and Good Luck in the Contest!!!! Take Care,
    ~pithyAplomb.

  • Midgetbridgey
    May 30

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    I will comment once the contest is nearly finished :) best of luck plx comment me :) -midgetbridgey
  • midnightblue1272
    May 29
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    Wow!

    Love the melodic tone to this one. This would make a very haunting song. Nice job.