Mirrored dejection
refracting through your skull
sizzling the piteous apprehension
while
cleaving at your soul
Author notes
15 Words
Prompt-Shedding the fear
A contest entry
- quickie by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended May 27, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Round Contest - Round 1 - All are welcome by Florida Sunshine.
525 points, ended June 14, 2008, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please critique my work if you feel this needs improving
Comments
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Powerful and concise.
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Very powerful words...they speak volumns!!! Thanks and best of luck!
Az -
You know I can understand why you won a Gold trophy for this. Although short it's awesome!
I like the use of the title really sets the whole write for the meaning behind it.
Nice job! Thanks for entering my round countest ~ Best of luck to you! -
Good luck in my contest.
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Congrats on the gold!
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Thank you very much!
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I can just see this pinging in the brain and sticking to the soul.
Marlene -
So deeply descriptive and immensely creative... x
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i really like the deep packed feelings you have used in this wonderfully penned poem, i love the cleacing at your soul and how it can so relate to fear, i love this poem, good luck in the contest and as always, keep up the wonderful writing ~Amy
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Wow. Really good job with this piece, short, sweet and to the point. Elegant, and your vocabulary is refreshing. Great job, and good luck in the contest.
-Les
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