Ebony sprawls
turn longer
clinging desperation
choking breath,
if only we step
out of lights of past,
into present feet.
Author notes
"Most of the shadows of this life are caused by our standing in our own sunshine."
Ralph Waldo Emerson
In a list
A contest entry
- 10/20/20 Quickie.. yep, another by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended May 27, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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so true,
'One step for man, a giant leap for mankind' told by neil Armstrong when he landed on moon in 1969. You were not born then, I was in 5th standard. Whole world is so jubiliant. Thank you for reminding
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you are most welcome...I am glad you like this....
and ofcourse I was not born then, nice to know you remember suhc an event.
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Wonderful take on the prompt. A lot of truth in your words. I enjoyed the hope you portrayed as well. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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A wondeful creation for the prompt!!! You have given it your personal touch!!!
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Thank you !
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Beautifully written!
So compelling and over powering!
I love how you ended it like a cliffhanger!
Excellent job! & Good luck!
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Thanks dear..glad you enjoyed it so much!
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Yes! We surely need to do that, or else we shall never move on past the darkness... great take!!
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Wow brilliant take on the prompt! Was so beautifully expressed in 20 words. Great write & good luck in the contest!
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Thanks a lot for your appreciation!
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Interesting and provacative take... Good luck in the contest...
Ken
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Thanks a lot for your wishes!
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Wonderful take on the prompt. I see that you are having a very creative night with your muse. A most enjoyable read. Best wishes in the comp
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Thanks a lot, just that it is morning here lol..have a lovely night yourself!
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Wonderfully stated my friend...I love the beauty in metaphor and hope for the future in letting go of the past...excellent work...
Best to you!
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Thank you so much!
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